Comments on 'Newborn Dreams'
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New! Entered: 2015-11-21
|In Elfquest, Leetah the healer was there to help *spark* a cub with Nightfall and Redlance. I think it would be awkward for Willow to be in the room with her grandmother and True Edge trying to make it happen!!! Hopefully she can do some laying on of hands (clotes on) and that would work!! Elves are just so awkward for me!! LOL ;)|
New! Entered: 2012-06-28
|Knowing what is to come (yes, I've been reading stories out of order, bad Sofia) Willow's doubts hit me right in the heart. There's so much hope building up in this story, which just makes the stories that come later all the more tragic. I love the interaction between Kestrel, Snowfall and True Edge; the way they're not always in perfect agreement, but always listen to and respect each other is wonderful.|
New! Entered: 2011-09-20
|Given our tribe's history -- how healers sparking children is so much a part of the early tribal lore, and a point of pride for the tribe's early healers -- it seems natural that someone would get to this sooner or later! I like that the requestors here aren't young and impulsive elves who just can't wait for Recognition -- but rather, elders who know both the joys and pains of parenthood, as well as life. I think it lends a certain poignant urgency to their desire.|
New! Entered: 2011-06-16
|OMG. I have the image now in my mind that Willow an Beetle (Beetle all ahead) will sit around and try to figure out what is different with Otter and Newt and what could have kicked i in for Starskimmer. |
At any rate. I am relay looking forward to see this story developed. It's such a crazy event for the whole tribe. I like how everyone but Snowfall and Kestrel seem a bit hesitant (even IF i love Beetle very much as she just jumped in already making plans). It showes that trough a healer is there now, some things still remain a little touchy.
I would also love to see how the rest of the tribe takes this...
New! Entered: 2011-03-01
|I think you did a great job showing the varied perspectives, and bringing each together on this... :) It will be an interesting journey for all of them, tribe included, I think!|
New! Entered: 2011-03-01
|Oooo, how exciting!! I love how you managed to capture the voices of all four of the major players in this piece. I like Willow's level headed manner of dealing with the request. It really shows that she's growing as a person as well as a healer. Oh, I do so hope it works out for the three hopefuls. I would love to see a child who is the result of being raised with equal parts Kestrel, Snowfall, and True Edge. What fun!|