Comments on 'Near Miss'
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New! Updated: 2016-08-04
|Well that brings up a good point. What's the protocol for discovery and/or capture? If they keep word hunting, it's only a matter of time (even centuries from now) before their luck runs out.|
New! Entered: 2012-12-26
|Ooh, you really had me on the edge of my seat, there! I was wondering just how Beetle WOULDN'T be spotted! O_O I agree, it's an interesting question -- would they be ready? I'm not even sure myself what being ready would mean; what they would do. I do wonder if it will eventually be one of these near misses that doesn't actually miss that final time that means the elves' discovery by these humans?|
New! Entered: 2012-06-27
|Tense! Curiosity does get the best of Beetle at times; lucky she wasn't discovered. I'm a little curious myself, about what happened after this. How bad was the mood in the group on the way home, I wonder.|
New! Entered: 2012-01-28
|This is really interesting. I like how it brings up a really good question, if they had found out would they have been ready for whatever happened next? Would they know what to do? really good way to bring up a great question. I also really enjoyed seeing Beetle's intense curiosity here, it can just go to show that curiosity isn't always the best of things.|
New! Entered: 2011-09-21
|I definitely like this for a look at how the elves are becoming comfortable, in a way, with their targets... and how that sense of comfort may be what leads to overconfidence or carelessness. What strikes me is that it feels a bit like Beetle is subconsciously unconvinced that being discovered would be such a terrible thing -- which perhaps makes sense, for those who have been observing the humans for so long.|
New! Entered: 2011-07-27
|For those asking about fallout... please feel free to jump on this and write about it!!! I'm sure there was some! :) Just not sure what it was... :)|
New! Entered: 2011-06-23
|Whew, I'm glad nothing serious happened, and Beetle didn't get hurt, either. But yeah, she really was overconfident here - in that regard, it may even have been a good thing, as it reminded them not to test their luck, without serious consequences in itself.|
Echoing that I really would like to see possible consequences from this :).
New! Entered: 2011-06-18
|I think this was a very good reflection on something I think a lot of us fall prey to - laxness due to overconfidence! It was great that this ended how it did. I, too am interested in potential ripples as a result from these events.|
New! Entered: 2011-06-16
|Whew.. that was indeed close. I love the tension in the end, with Brightwood so annoyed with Beetle. I'm sure Cloudfern would have had a heart attack! |
What I also liked is the sense of Beetle growing a little to confident into their hiding skills. This "we are always careful" is something I know from myself when I get to easy on things because I did them so many times before.
ANd yes I agree. I'd like to know if there was anything following this event!
New! Entered: 2011-06-07
|Interesting -- is there any further fallout from this incident? Does she get a further talking-to from One-Leg (he's always so colorful, we could sell tickets!), or is Beetle suspended from the team for a bit? Just curious... would love to know what you think the fallout might be!|