Comments on 'Broken'
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New! Entered: 2012-02-09
|This is a really interesting look at the two of them. I haven't read much yet of the two of them. I enjoyed seeing their odd relationship of the uncle being so much younger. |
This story made me feel sad for Newt, he just kind of accepts that he isn't going to be a good archer. Though I think he has wisdom beyond his years with the fact that he accepts he isn't going to be good but he can still get better. :)
New! Entered: 2011-09-21
|At this point, knowing Newt, I would expect nothing less of him than to try, even with something he's not proving very good at -- but I like the glimpse here of a boy who's frustrated at something he's not getting, nonetheless. It *is* hard to think of Newt as Thornbow's uncle, rather than the other way around! I'd definitely like to see more of that family dynamic, because even in the current tribe, Newt *is* still rich in family connections. And I get this feeling that they benefit from relating to him, as much as he does to them.|
New! Entered: 2011-07-08
|Thanks ladies :) |
It was fun to write this one and yes. I think it's important for me to show Newt's limitation. I picked him up because he has such a wonderful balance between being talented in some thing and not in others.
The bow seems to be a favorite weapon in so man holts and it is kinda fun to show that it can be a hard weapon to handle... and that Newt still just is a child somehow who doesn't want to be behind even IF he knows he won't be as good as his agemates.
New! Entered: 2011-06-26
|That was a nice little story - it's good to see Thornbow and Newt interacting, and I really like how Newt is aware of his limitations but still is trying to improve. My favourite were the allusions to his crush on Longshot, though - so sweet :p!|
New! Entered: 2011-06-23
|It's always interesting to read about elves interact that I haven't truly seen talk to each other in other stories (yet anyways). And as others have said, it's nice to see that elves aren't automatically good at eveything they try to do!|
New! Entered: 2011-01-13
|I think what I like, most of all here... is that we have a reminder that elves aren't always good at everything they try... but that they keep trying. I like Newt's realism and honesty.|
New! Entered: 2010-12-29
|Interesting! I like seeing Thornbow as a nephew of Newt, it's kind of amusing to think about. I like your use of archery to show Newt's limitations - and acceptance of them. I wonder if he'll start to beat Fadestar and Otter in spear games later on, or if he'll be stubborn and focus on archery practice "just because"...|
New! Entered: 2010-12-22
|This was such a nice, short but sweet story. I really liked how down to earth it was, teaching us all that even though we all long for those over-coming the odds Hollywood moments, we are all limited in a way. Thanks for this one. It's always good to see more of Thornbow.|