Comments on 'The Drummer's Dilemma'

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Ingrid G.
New! Entered: 2016-04-19
Wow, I haven't ever seen Moss angry or brooding before! He always seemed so laid back to me. And how ironic that he was the one acting more like Beetle than Beetle! That said I TOTALLY get why he would do that as an artist and how obsessed he could be with the new music!
Whitney Ware
New! Entered: 2014-01-28
I was shocked to see I had not already commented on this one! It's powerfully poignant. As others have already said, I loved seeing Moss contrasting here with Thornbow and Beetle, and the description of the Baha sky burial was wonderful! (Plus -- strangleweed! Am I wrong in thinking this was the first use of strangleweed in the club's history? I'm racking my brain trying to think of another!)
Holly H.
New! Entered: 2011-09-21
I really love how much ground this story covers, and what a complete look it gives us of Moss, who it feels like we haven't seen enough of in stories, especially in stories that focus on him. I particularly liked the way he personally wrestled with his anger over what Beetle and the others had done; or how he contested with Thornbow.

Though, I felt that Moss was in the right, there. Perhaps he got a bit too close, but he *was* keeping the others safe by keeping an eye on the humans, and I felt like, as caught up as he was in watching them, had they made a move that would have endangered the others, he would have snapped out of it and done what he was meant to.

But at the same time, I really liked that he DID get caught up in watching them and starting to feel sympathy for them -- extending himself to try to understand what they were doing and feeling. One gets the clear feeling that Thornbow probably would not have had the same reaction, if he'd been the one in that position. It really nicely foreshadows Moss's decision to join the word-hunting team.
Lyn Cavalier
New! Entered: 2011-07-27
I'm glad I left some time (a lot of time, now) for this to simmer and for me to read it again. I'd forgotten most of it... and it's beautiful! Hannah, you are so vivid in your descriptions, it's easy to get lost in the story! From small details like Beetle doing some of her work-punishment, to bigger ones, like Moss's complete captivation in the Now of what was happening... this is a lovely story! I hope you'll show us what that conversation between Moss and Windburn is like one day!
Sofia Lindström
New! Entered: 2011-06-24
The humans ceremony was very touching and I thank you for the translation. To see Moss so fascinated by the humans, after being so angry with Willow & co, was an interesting twist - I curious to see what happens next!
Melanie D.
New! Entered: 2010-12-08
Okay first of all . I flipping LOVE to see Thornbow in a bigger role here. He's such a great character. Thank you so much for giving him some spotlight :)

This story was great. One of your best so far. I really liked to see how Moss mind worked here and how he cane to his will to join the word-hunters eventually and how he opened up his mind. Through a song of course :)

There was so much going on here and it worked well together :D The interaction with the different triebmembers was great to see and the scene with the humans really touching.

If there would be a little thing I have to say it was the switch of the POV from Weasel too Moss. It wasn't really bothering but it made me unsure for a moment.

But altogether Great story :D
Peggy B.
New! Entered: 2010-12-01
Yaaay, it is online!!! :D Told you before, that I really like your description of Moss in this story. You make him very vivid and tangible.
Beth K.
New! Entered: 2010-12-01
I love the range of Moss that is captured here - from teacher to crafter to elder to distracted-musician - it really shows a lot of different aspects of him. Goldspice is lovely in her supporting role her, she comes across so warm and full of care, and still very individual. I liked the touch of the wolf's POV for pieces of this too. Very nicely done. Definitely a story to chew on... and the dedication is very touching. :)
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