Comments on 'Swim'

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Peggy B.
New! Entered: 2015-12-30
I loved to see Starskimmer in her motherly role here and how she handled the toddler. It was great to see how she had developed a certain parenting style over the years but was still willing to accept advice from someone else.
Sofia Lindström
New! Entered: 2014-10-12
Otter sure is a passionate one about water! Love that the story ended with a twist like that - cold, but still wanting to swim :)
Emberra Owen
New! Entered: 2012-02-25
I really enjoyed seeing Starskimmer as a mother in this. I liked seeing her trying to reign in Otter and for his own safety refuse to allow him to swim. It was also really nice to see how she thought out Suddendusk's advice, and realized it may actually be helpful. Overall I have to say that I rather enjoyed the story.
Mareike Heilemann
New! Entered: 2012-01-22
Hehe, poor Starskimmer, Otter's enthusiasm for swimming just can't be curbed! This was very cute, and I enjoyed both seeing little Otter and Starskimmer as a mother. And the cosy moment at the end was also very nice!

(I think there's a "not" missing in this sentence: She hoped that this concession was the start of a bad pattern.)
Whitney Ware
New! Entered: 2011-09-29
I love seeing Starskimmer as a mother here -- it's wonderful! And little Otter is just so adorable!
Holly H.
New! Entered: 2011-09-21
I really like here how Suddendusk's theory *seemed* sound... but wasn't a match for Otter's affinity for water! (It's a nice reminder that Suddendusk is an enthusiastic theorist and inventor, but not all the ideas he comes up with are gems!) And I liked the portrait of Starskimmer's motherly dilemma (when to remain firm with an answer, and when to try a different tactic).
Heidi Henderson
New! Entered: 2011-07-21
Hehe, you've done such a great job in capturing the exuberance of a toddler here. I also liked the warm, cozy moment you detailed at the story's end.
Lyn Cavalier
New! Entered: 2011-06-16
This was fun to write and is definitely based on some experience Witt my own wonderful, sometimes stubborn, son.
Hannah Bochart
New! Entered: 2010-12-15
Aww, such a great look at little Otter. We really don't see enough of him these days. I love the "Okay, maybe I can't get what I want, but I am still going to walk on my own" moment. Otter's stubborn enough to put up a fight, but still knows that Mom's the boss.

Short, sweet, and really nice story.
Melanie D.
New! Entered: 2010-11-24
Hehe.. I can see this might be based on a real life experience My nephew and niece can be the same. Especially the "Down" felt very familiar ^^
It was nice to see Otter interacting with another possible father and I liked to see a bit of Starskimmer's education style and how she thinks of it and how she sees that her children are different all along :)

The warming up was very nice as well :D
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