Comments on 'Snap and Run'

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Tone Strand
New! Entered: 2012-02-02
My sympathies held with Dreamflight through the whole story. Snapping like that at every target, who might just be trying to help, isn't the best way to seem good in others eyes... but it is realistic. Many people do, or have done that. Which we secretly hate with ourselves when we are as upset as poor Dreamflight is here. Though, dealing with someone like that isn't easy. Which is why I love this story, it shows both sides.
Holly H.
New! Entered: 2011-09-22
I liked getting to see all these little pieces. It's good and right that her tribemates tried to help Dreamflight... but it's also true that none of them seemed to truly understand or try to get at the root of her problems. I see a desire to help in all of them, but also a sort of impatience with her. Not that she was making it easy for anyone! And in a small tribe, it's difficult to have someone who's in pain and just lashing out at any target that presents itself. You really kind of feel for everyone here, Dreamflight included. She needs something... but not necessarily what she was getting from anyone here.
Sofia Lindström
New! Entered: 2011-06-21
As much as her denial of her parents maybe not being the best of couples irked me, I still felt for Dreamflight all the way through this. She's barely a century old, young for a Wolfrider, so not as worldwise as most. At the same time, she's lived for nearly a 100 years with her parents being lifemates and like most children most likely never thought too closely on the state of their relationship other than what they wished her to know - yes, children often know when parents fight or are unhappy with each other, but their still parents. Few children have the cynicism to think their parents as emotional and conflicted as the rest of the world and when it comes this late in life it must truly have been a shock, which this story clearly shows.
Lyn Cavalier
New! Entered: 2011-06-17
As the author, I think what I was trying to show was how hard it can be to adjust to changes, especially major ones like wrapping. I also wonder sometimes if death wasn't easier to accept than wrapping. With wrapping, there is this sense of wanting time to stand still for the one wrapped and wishing for a healer.... I know dreamflights reaction seems super selfish but it's also so real-seeming that there would be moments or weeks of the angry and bitter grief reaction. Not toentiom starting to face reality that the perfect family wasn't really perfect
Hannah Bochart
New! Entered: 2010-11-22
I have to stand out against the choir and say that my pity for Dreamflight held strong throughout this. Yes, I think she is being selfish, and I feel bad for all of those who offered a helping hand, but hell, the poor kid is going through hell. She is reeling from the fact that her entire childhood happiness was based on a sham relationship. No, she's not behaving admirably, but that is what makes it so real! Enough with the stoicism, time for bitter, pettiness like Dreamflight and Honey's. Bravo and well done for giving us a truly organic tale!
Mareike Heilemann
New! Entered: 2010-11-05
At the beginning I really felt for Dreamflight ... But as the story progressed, I rather wanted to shake her, and I felt more for those offering their help because it's very clear that she just doesn't want to listen to them. I really hope she will stop feeling sorry for herself because she is being awfully unfair to everyone, and that makes it rather hard to feel for her. It shows how much she is Honey's daughter, though - they seem to assume the worst of everyone a lot. Knowing that Honey grew up in a loving family and Dreamflight in a seemingly so, at least, I wonder where that's coming from ...

Still, it was good to see how the tribe worked together to reach out to her even if their attempts fell on deaf ears!
Melanie D.
New! Entered: 2010-11-01
Uff... I felt with Dreamfight at the first paragraph... but that changed during the story. I agree with Linda. I feel more for those who offered her help. I mean I can understand that she's hurting. It's hard to see the image you build to yourself all shattered, but as someone who went through it herself I just have to wonder if she ever will realize that there is more then this ONE way to be happy.
I like that of all elfes Cloudfern tried to reach out to her and offer something. I like how several elves wanted to point out that things just change and that it hasn't to be bad.
I agree with Cloudfern on one thing. She is selfish here. I hope she'll soon get over it and will accept the change. Maybe it will help Honey as well.
Beth K.
New! Entered: 2010-11-01
It's good to read this story! It really shows the tribe offering what they can, and the different personalities of everyone involved. I love Moss and the drum especially. I didn't really consider how much Dreamflight might take after her mother before reading this. Definitely a good retrospective look at what happened before. :)
Linda Aarts
New! Entered: 2010-11-01
Even though I know this story is backdated, I still want to shake Dreamflight; because since her mother's unwrapping, she again feels sorry for herself ;) She is clearly a daughter of Honey, heehee! I felt mostly sorry for the people trying to help her, than for Dreamflight ;)

I liked the little short pieces showing that a lot of tribesmembers want to help her - that Honey's wrapping made the tribe offer Dreamflight all the help they could (even Notch!)
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