Comments on 'I Am Not Him'

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Ingrid G.
New! Entered: 2015-10-24
The dreams were very powerful! And we can FEEL her shame and guilt. And OMG, the slow walk back to the tribe when it was "over", but not truly over, was utterly painful! Wonderful writing!!
Emberra Owen
New! Entered: 2011-12-28
I really like this story. Seeing how much she not only suffers, but learns from the punishment given to her. I like seeming all the things that go through her mind during her shunning.
Holly H.
New! Entered: 2011-09-22
Really good to see Willow's reaction here. As harsh as it may sound, it's good to see that she had to continue to wrestle with what she had done, and what was revealed to her. It makes more sense than that she was able to arrive at perfect understanding right away. And I also like how her return to the tribe brought that episode to a close, but it was clear that there are still things that aren't entirely resolved. Because that, too, keeps it from seeming all too easy.
Sofia Lindström
New! Entered: 2011-06-30
To see Willow finally realize what she truly did to Brightwood and her family, as well as how Willow is her own toughest judge. It will be very interesting to see how this will affect her and her relationships in the future!
Peggy B.
New! Entered: 2010-11-10
I really like that you let Willow suffer so much (as hard as it sounds). It is easy to feel for her. Great!! I am very curious how she is going to compensate her guilt.
Beth K.
New! Entered: 2010-10-24
Beautifully written story! It was great to follow Willow's thoughts and emotions as she worked her way through to her conclusions about why what she'd done was so wrong. The mantra really tied each piece together, and I love how each area really brought a different atmosphere to the piece. I really feel for Willow, that's going to be a difficult burden to carry. Hopefully she gets some comfort in the Now...
Vicki Stephenson
New! Entered: 2010-10-12
Awesome story. It makes it so clear all the things she had been thinking that led up to her misdeed and how that deed now looks in the light of Owl's story. She understands now. One question - did Willow send her feelings to everyone?
Lyn Cavalier
New! Entered: 2010-10-05
Heidi, this piece is so powerful! I feel so badly for Willow here... and I think that you did an excellent job giving balance - where Willow shows both that she knows what she did was wrong, and where she also knows that she is NOT Owl... :) Great work on a story that I know didn't come easily!
Melanie D.
New! Updated: 2010-10-01
Very very good story Heidi! I like the way you made Willow realize and let it sink in WHAT the problem had been. It was really a hard punishment, but I think that Willow really had to make it out on her own. If she had told someone she might had had the puffer to not get into herself deep enough to make that final conclusion.

It was hard to watch her suffering through and yeah... I think the hardest thing wil be to forgive herself in the end.

But I think ... she's right.. she's not Owl. Not anymore, she took a wrong turn by healing Brightwood against the family's will but now she's reflecting her own doings and sees what Owl never had the chance to see....
Mareike Heilemann
New! Entered: 2010-09-30
Poor Willow :( ... Honestly, this punishment seems almost cruel to me (which wasn't Windburn's intention, of course ...) - forcing Willow to cope with this without even one word of comfort from her family and friends. It would be hard enough without the shunning! I'm glad she got the message, though ...

Great work, Heidi!
Megan McCarthy
New! Entered: 2010-09-29
Poor, poor Willow. Even though everyone who shared the sending had to live with those images in their heads, Willow was the only one who was _forced_ to live with it alone. Thankfully, it does seem that the punishment fulfilled its purpose, but I have to wonder if there was a less harsh way of getting the point across to her. Judging by her thoughts at the end, it seems like she's going to be haunted by this for a long time to come :( A very moving story, Heidi. Wonderful job.
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