Comments on 'A Grandmother's Sadness'

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Ingrid G.
New! Entered: 2015-10-19
We all know that one kid who you think needs help. And what a surprise and a lesson to us how much we tend to underestimate people. Of course Willow will be fine, Grandmother!!
Whitney Ware
New! Entered: 2014-01-28
I remember being thrilled when I first read this to see that someone was finally witnessing (in fic) the Baha's manhood initiation ritual! On a re-read now, I was struck by the travel distances -- we know the boys will be at most an night's travel from the Ramat colony for this ritual, so Kestrel will have to have flown from the Holt to the very extreme range of her ability to have gotten so far south! Just just making note of that, in case future authors use this fic as precedent.
Holly H.
New! Entered: 2011-09-22
I liked the way this underscored that the sharing and the shunning was hard on others in the tribe, not just on Willow herself. And it was great to see how Kestrel initially wanted to read into the humans' situation her own feelings and preoccupation with Willow's situation... but that she realized in the end that it *was* her imposing that, and the reality was perhaps different.
Sofia Lindström
New! Entered: 2011-06-30
What an interesting human ritual, as well as an interesting look into Kestrel's mind. I enjoyed the mirror of Willow's struggle she found in the young human and how his success gave her hope.
Lyn Cavalier
New! Entered: 2011-06-16
This was great to co write!!! It was neat getting to share in creating this snapshot of Kestrel, and it was fun including a glimpse of the humans.
Beth K.
New! Entered: 2010-10-24
Interesting story! I feel like Kestrel may have lived through a lot of pain, and it's definitely clear that she still cares very deeply for Willow - very interesting that it's the humans that make her realize her granddaughter will have the strength to carry on. I like the addition of the masks! You wrote her emotions very well, my heart was breaking in the beginning of the story!
Mareike Heilemann
New! Entered: 2010-10-01
Poor Kestrel, too ... (With those last stories I just have the urge to hug fictional characters!) That's really one of the hardest things ever - having someone suffer you love and not being able to reach out to him :(.

I'm glad to see that she found some comfort, though ... Somehow I think it's very interesting that Kestrel keeps seeing the parallels between the humans and her own tribe, like in the story where she found the drowned child. I'm really hoping that we'll see more like this!
Melanie D.
New! Entered: 2010-09-27
Poor Kestrel... one wonders if Windburn had thought about this. I can feel her pain and her broken heart. It's so HARD to let one you love without comfort.
But I'm happy to see that she found some comfort herself... this ritual was very interesting as well. I wonder if it's some kind of manhood-ritual?
And the "lesson" it teaches Kestrel is not all in the face but delivered quite clear :D Wonderfull ^^
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