Comments on 'Overdrawn Expectations'
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New! Entered: 2015-01-26
|This is really neat, being able to see Kestrel not only as a mother but what her lifemating with Boar was like. I would be infuriated with Boar if he hadn't returned when he promised, I'm happy Shyheart was there with some great advice. |
I'm not surprised Kestrel reacted the way she did when Boar return, though Boar really does have a good point. I'm happy that Kestrel realized her son is growing up, and that she sends to Boar in the end.
New! Entered: 2011-09-22
|Really fascinating here to see that Kestrel's experience of having a Recognized mate, and of shared parenting, was so imperfect. She and Boar may have made a wonderful child together, but they don't otherwise seem that well-matched; which is something that must happen, but we don't see it very often! I do admit that even though I could see Boar's side in the end, I had more sympathy with Kestrel's viewpoint. ;-) They are a fascinating couple.|
New! Entered: 2011-09-14
|I like how both Boar and Kestrel's points of view got represented here. Kestrel's got the most explanation, the story being from her POV and all, but Boar's view of the world still managed to be explored and there really was no "winner". Very nicely done!|
New! Entered: 2011-09-14
|Ooooh, nice one! I can totally see Kestrel's side of the argument, of course, but at the same time I can see Boar's as well. In some ways, they're each right, and in others, they're each wrong. It's sad that I think part of Tumble's original disappointment came from Kestrel expressing as fact *her* interpretation of Boar's promise to him! Of course, on the other hand, Boar could have stepped up to the plate and realized how eager his son would be for attention and fulfilled his promise sooner rather than later. He's right, Kestrel can be a bit obsessive, while she's right about Boar that he can be forgetful! (I really think he had totally forgotten!) For an elf who lives so much in the Now, it would be easy to actually forget a promise made at a different time. With Kestrel, it was interesting to see her have to acknowledge herself painting her own emotions on how she perceived her cubling to be feeling, instead of realising it was less of a big deal for him than it had gotten to be for her. Luckily Tumble has that cub reslience to fall back on (as well as Snowdrop's influence) and no doubt he's growing up to understand both his mother and father and how to cope with their faults. ;)|
New! Entered: 2010-10-24
|Great dynamics between the characters here! It's very intriguing to have this glimpse into Kestrel's past, especially with Boar and Tumble! I think the characters act very realistically, and it's easy to understand where the tension comes from. I'd like to see more about Boar and Kestrel!|
New! Entered: 2010-10-05
|:) I really appreciated seeing the side of Kestrel that is not always patient, that is not always understanding or rational! :) It gives a depth to who she is now...|
New! Entered: 2010-10-01
|Aww, poor little Bowflight ... I agree with Mel, children forget quickly but not if you keep disappointing them. So let's hope Boar didn't make that a habit ...|
And I can understand Kestrel well, even if she was a bit overprotective - but the great thing is I can understand Boar, too. That makes the fight feel very real!
New! Entered: 2010-09-30
|Ohh that was a good one Megan. I like it how real the fight is between the parents. The diffrent POV's and how it got tighter and tighter to the point you see that you are in a bad position but can't step back without loosing your face. Very veray good. |
The first scnene trough was heratbreaking. I understand Kestrel very well. And though I think Shyheart is right I also think that if it happens too often a child WILL remebere it. I think Boar just should clarify better next time what he's talking about when he gves a tme :P