Comments on 'The Lesson of the Last Healer'
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New! Entered: 2016-02-04
|Very gripping and well paced story. I am glad to have followed the illustration here. I wish there was a way to teach students with humility and shame for us poor humans.|
I will be stepping over to the next dot in this puzzle right now.
New! Entered: 2015-10-18
|I really emphasize with the betrayal Blacksnake and Axehand felt. Especially because Owl never made it up to them. In a twisted way, I could see why Owl's plan would make sense and how he could go mad (from what I've read about the death of your Recognized). Also curious why no one tried throwing stones or rocks to knock him out. But I loved, loved, loved this story!!!|
New! Entered: 2012-02-21
|This one was a toughie -- I've got the conclusion to Owl's storyline locked in my head, and always figured I'd be able to get that written before this storyline came down the pipe. ::insert laugh track here:: It was a challenge to tackle the snowy chase flashback scene in a way that would still allow me to get tackle the entire Winter Plague story without cheating the climax of that story. I think we pulled it off here... now I just need a long vacation on a sandy beach with no distractions, so that I can get the second half of the winter plague story out of my head and down onto paper!|
New! Entered: 2011-09-22
|I was only one part of a story that was a real group effort, and I very much appreciate the job done by my co-writers -- particularly Whit, who had such a vivid idea for the story's climax that I had the pleasure of experiencing parts of the story as a reader, as well as as a writer!|
New! Entered: 2011-06-30
|There aren't enough words, in any language, to describe how intense that was, and how much history it added to the "Willow becomes a healer"-plot. This really hit home how scary Willow's actions were to her tribemates and it does seem she learned something from it. And Windburn as well.|
New! Entered: 2010-12-21
|I really enjoyed reading this story. Owl's fall is terrifyingly well written and very believable. I really hope we get to see more of him like this.|
New! Entered: 2010-10-12
|Damn. That leaves a gut-punch sensation, now doesn't it. I won't repeat what others have said, aside from saying, "Thank you for making me empathize with Owl." It would have been so much easier to make him a villain, but you made him so much more than that. Thanks.|
New! Entered: 2010-10-12
|Wow, what a story. I was riveted all the way through. Now I understand, like the other elves who experienced it for the first time, what had caused Owl's madness and why the decision was made to kill him. Oof. And it makes even more sense now why so many of the elves had been angry when Willow had taken over the decision to heal Brightwood. Really, no one handled the development of Willow's healing powers well. But hopefully things will go much better now.|
New! Entered: 2010-10-07
|Such a powerful story. I'm glad Willow didn't have to listen alone... that the memories were shared with those who wanted to know! Poor Willow, though, to have to bear it alone during the immediate shunning that follows.|
New! Entered: 2010-09-20
|Wow ... That was a terrific and terrifying story. I think telling it this way really was a great way - it gives it so much more of an echo, feeling the weight behind it that has stayed with those elves living through it for such a long time. Even knowing how it all happened, I was totally captured so that I held my breath! |
It's so tragic that in Owl's mind it all made some sort of sick sense, that it made him go so far ... Especially seeing how he was before ... It really made me feel for him even if nothing could ever excuse his actions.
I have to agree with Peggy, though, that the remark about Beesting was somewhat incongruous - it made me lose the thread for a bit and I had to go look it up in Owl's CIS afterwards.
I'm looking forward to seeing how Willow and the rest of the tribe will react to this!
New! Entered: 2010-09-18
|This story was really heavy, and really well written. I liked seeing all the different perspectives, and how they flowed and meshed together, giving each elf a chance to colour the memories and give another view. I think this is one of the most dramatic epics, and it's fantastic to have that history written out. I think that the storytelling of it is so much more effective then writing the piece set in that time could be - and the lessons definitely echo with the choices Willow has made. Well done!|
New! Updated: 2010-09-15
|Everyone in the tribe lost someone. Some lost parents, some lost lifemates, a lot lost children and all lost loved ones.|
But Owl was the only one who lost everything; his lifemate, his children and his hopes and dreams
New! Updated: 2010-09-15
|Wow... That`s an awesome story. I gasped in shock when Owl attacked BS. And I really liked to see Windburns point of view at the beginning and the end, his fears and uncertainties.|
Really, really good!
I am so looking forward for tied stories. Quite curious how Willow will stomach this...
Only one small thing: I missed a short explanation for Beesting and what Owl did to her (I reread it in his CIS).
New! Entered: 2010-09-15
|I had tears in my eyes when kestrel’s memory was shared. I felt so badly with Owl and all I can say is… it was very real. I am a bit like that myself. Very intense moment. It’s so good to see Owl not only as the “healer” from back then but him as a whole character. |
It frightens you all the more to see what he became. The scene with blacksnake made my blood run cold. It really raise the question how far you can bend an elf before he breaks. There was so much frustration in his words, so much … helpless madness. Just scary…
It’s such a well written story, it just blew mw away, Like a good thriller. I mean I know how it ended with Owl but the way to it is just scary. This slow raising of his madness. The determined thinking behind it. It’s so scary that when you look into Owl’s mind it all made sense in a twisted and sick way.
That truly was a hard lesson. Even for the reader. Fantastic. I’d die to know how Willow came to grips with this. This is even a harder burden then anything else the chief could do. In Willow’s case I might be glad for the shunning now to settle down and find to myself again…
New! Entered: 2010-09-14
|This is sincerely one of the best stories ever written in this Holt. Top 3, minimum. This was incredibly insightful on the tribe's history, the pace was excellent and the descriptions were so good I could really imagine having been part of that sending. 10/10|