Comments on 'Copper'

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Ingrid G.
New! Entered: 2016-08-16
"For a few short years I will be nothing but your father". OMG, the tears!! All the feels!! This birth story made me cry from the poignancy! Great job!!
Sofia Lindström
New! Entered: 2012-07-01
The long awaited cub! My heart ached for Farscout when he spoke to his newborn daughter, promising her as much time as the world would give him (and not even touching on the thought that the world might take her first; that's also the Way, but I get why he wouldn't think of that, in that moment). And the naming process was a lot of fun to read!
Whitney Ware
New! Entered: 2012-02-21
I've written enough baby-birth stories here at River Twine already that approaching this one was a bit of a challenge! For me, the key was realizing trying to imagine how a she-wolf would instinctively be reacting in this situation, and knowing that Brightwood tends to lean on her wolf-blood in times of stress.
Holly H.
New! Entered: 2010-11-21
The funny thing is, "Firefly" would have been a very good name for her! That's not a bad elf-name, I'm surprised we don't have it already. ;-) Overall this story does a great job of giving us a look at an oft-told story but managing to make it interesting in its details. Farscout's vow to his new child is particularly touching.
Beth K.
New! Entered: 2010-10-24
I love the subtle change to the ending since I saw it in-progress. Definitely more fitting now, with having Copper as a cubname until she finds her adult one! And 'Rawhide' still cracks me up as a potential name. :) I think this is a great birth story, and great to see the wolfish nature come out in Brightwood.
Lyn Cavalier
New! Entered: 2010-08-19
:) Yeay, "Firefly" (Just watched that series).

This was such a beautiful story. I loved every detail of it. And Farscout is going to be such a good daddy...
Rachel Vardys
New! Entered: 2010-08-16
Thank you, Whit! This came out great, and I am giddy to finally see it published. =)

"And I have to wonder... Was "Firefly" a Joss Whedon nod? :)"
Considering the author, I'd have to guess 'yes!'
Hannah Bochart
New! Entered: 2010-08-16
Finally, she's here! I really liked the naturalistic tones to this piece, especially how wolf-like the birthing process was. Farscout's monologue was pretty great, especially how he has already excepted the fact that his daughter will likely live to see him die. Very well done.


And I have to wonder... Was "Firefly" a Joss Whedon nod? :)
Peggy B.
New! Entered: 2010-08-16
I really like the difference between BW and FS. Here it shows again in her bound-to-earth and wolfish reaction and his wonder and amazement. The name search reflects that quite well, too. Very entertaining!
Its great how everything fits into place. I already wondered how FC will go protecting the borders for days and weeks and months only in his thongs. ;)
Mareike Heilemann
New! Entered: 2010-08-16
Aww, I have to say that Farscout's little speech to his daughter made me tear up! His decision to stay at the holt and only be her father really drove home how much his world has been changed by getting Brightwood back and now getting Copper.

I really liked Brightwood's demeanour throughout the birth, it showed well that she is a very wolfy elf :). And I agree with Mel that it showed how she's still a bit of a stranger in the tribe.
Melanie D.
New! Entered: 2010-08-16
I like how fitting this is for the couple and the little family altogether. That Copper is born a bit away from the tribe... that somehow fits the family who was somehow seperated from their "own" time for so long.
What really touched me was that Farscout choose to be just a father for now. It seems such a big sacrifice- at last for the Farscout we knew.

Another nice touch was the wolf-side of Brightwood. It immanently made me think of the scene with Windburn and his wolfish urge to chase the female away. So it somehow seemed so ... necessary for Brightwood.. It still shows she is a "stranger" to the tribe. Not really but .. well dose that make any sense??
Angie Cousins
New! Entered: 2010-08-15
Such a beautiful, evocative story. There was plenty of reality here - listening to the wolf-side, handling the water breaking, the afterbirth - but there was also a feeling of wonder and magic. Copper has been keeping her father waiting a very, very long time and Farscout's words drove that home for me. Brightwood's pride and strength are just as tangible here as his adoration. :)
Kyna Hansen
New! Entered: 2010-08-15
Wonderful! I'm so excited to have read this one. I like how they took a few tries deciding on a name for Copper. Yay!
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