Comments on 'All in a Name'

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Ingrid G.
New! Entered: 2016-09-15
My favorite part was when Tallow knew he would have given Doeskin his soul name! Now the women are bonded! It was moving to see all five of them together howling!!
Emberra Owen
New! Entered: 2015-01-28
Yuuup... I probably would have got drunk as well if I were to have my leg cut off. I have a love-hate relationship with Axehand not allowing his family in the room, on one hand I would have been the exact same way, but on the other hand I wouldn't want a family member of mine going through that without someone close. ugh, so tough.
Razzle C.
New! Entered: 2012-08-12
Wow. I truly consider this to be a masterpiece of yours -- and I mean that. Everything, and everyONE in it was so spot-on realistic in this. The ending came at exactly the right point for best effect, too.

I hope it will make sense, and be the compliment I so deeply mean to give, for me to say that I feel almost as though you, the author, have shared Axehand/One-Leg's Khash with us, the readers, through your beautiful, masterful writing of this particular piece.
Joanne P.
New! Entered: 2011-12-05
Wow, this story brought up so many feelings for me. I have a son with medical issues and often would accompany him into the operating room and stay with him until he was sedated, so I could really empathize with Doeskin. The emotions and actions feel so authentic. Good job!
Megan McCarthy
New! Entered: 2011-07-26
It's amazing how you can build up such suspense, even though we all already know that One-Leg survives this. I could just feel Doeskin's fear for her mate. I also love all the curses you come up with..."cross-eyed, bucktoothed, cubs of knock-kneed trolls" was a really good one XD
Sofia LindstrŲm
New! Entered: 2011-06-21
The very different fears and pain of One-Leg and his kin were handled well - Doeskin and the others not having their leg cut off were still so obviously shell shocked and unsure of what to do, so sure they'd lose One-Leg. And One-Leg, equally scared, but putting on such a brave face. The description of his trepidation for what was to come had my heart racing as well! The ending felt like it cut off at just the right place, leaving the reader to imagine what happens next.
Heidi Henderson
New! Entered: 2011-06-19
I like this different glimpse we get of One-Leg in this story. It's really interesting to see what went on behind the scenes in his head here, so to speak.

And I agree; I'm so glad we know how things turn out, because the suspense would be killing me otherwise!
Whitney Ware
New! Entered: 2011-06-17
You build up the dread here like a master -- and then you have the cojones to just chop the fic short. ::performing the "I am not worthy" bow:: Brilliant work. Absolutely brilliant!
Holly H.
New! Entered: 2010-11-21
I really, really liked what you did with this story, once you got around to addressing this key moment of One-Leg's life. I particularly like how this one works Doeskin in there so strongly. Here, you can feel the uncertainty that existed about whether Axehand would survive, even though of course we know he did. What I particularly liked, though, was that you did something unusual with the "sharing soul-names" thing. I thought it was very appropriate to show that while that's the greatest gift an elf can give, it isn't an easy gift, and receiving it isn't always an occasion for joy. I'm intrigued now to wonder how long it was before Doeskin returned the gift -- if she did at all. (I think she did, though; I think I recall that being so.)
Lyn Cavalier
New! Entered: 2010-08-19
Chris, what I have to say has been said here already. This story was moving, and so well-written, and so touching. Poor Doeskin. And Poor Axehand. *hugs* to them. I'm so glad that we know how the story ended... otherwise, this would have been quite the cliffy.
Hannah Bochart
New! Entered: 2010-08-16
You know, my friend, you are one damn good writer! I love how you steered clear of any melodrama even though it could have so easily slipped into such a space due to the subject matter. You walked the line of realism effortlessly, especially with regards to poor Doeskin. So often we see the stoic woman standing by her man's side as though she didn't have a care in the world. In reality, most of us can't handle being close to the one's we love most when their lives are threatened, especially when that closeness is accompanied by such a connection as it did in this tale.

And my favorite line in the whole deal was: "Still he kept the gamblerís mask on." I understand One Leg so much better now. Thanks.
Mareike Heilemann
New! Entered: 2010-08-16
Wow, that was a very strong story - I really liked seeing how Axehand was staying strong for the others though he was terribly afraid. I guess that's someone we all know ...

Poor Doeskin, though - that gift can be a two-edged sword, especially in such a situation ...

It was great seeing all the different reactions of his family, too, and I especially liked how Tallow knew and understood what he had done!
Peggy B.
New! Entered: 2010-08-16
Wow, great! Very stirring! Most of all I liked the reaction of overstrained Doeskin, it felt so real.
Melanie D.
New! Entered: 2010-08-16
Oh wow, Chris. This was very... close to life. I love all this heavyniss weighting on the family ... something I can feel very well at the moment and I just love how you tackled One-Leg's feelings. I know this "Be strong for them" and masking of fear-feel. Sometimes it seems the last thing you can hold on not to loose your mind, for them and yourself. Very very moving. I found myself fearing for him even through I KNOW he did it!
Angie Cousins
New! Entered: 2010-08-15
This was a powerful glimpse into the fear of that moment. It makes it very real. I've gotten so used to thinking of One Leg as fearless that this reminds me that sometimes courage is bought at a very high price. Bravo!
Kyna Hansen
New! Entered: 2010-08-15
Always glad to have more insight into a character so close to my own. I'm surprised in some ways that this story hadn't come about earlier just based on the subject matter. Good job :)
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