Comments on 'A Sister's Secret'

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Ingrid G.
New! Entered: 2016-03-26
I can't wait to see what happens with Rainpace! I would never have put these two together, even in "Crush Mode" LOL! I really like teenage Nightstorm!!
Beth K.
New! Entered: 2015-07-18
Really cute to get to see this interaction between the sisters! I really like how you've written Brook at 15 - it comes off as so sweet and natural. Snowfall is wonderful as well, with that patience and maturity that speaks of the age gap and also her personality. Great little scene! :)
Joan Milligan
New! Entered: 2014-08-17
I love teenage Nightstorm here - really when I think about it, of all our tribe, she's someone I can really easily picture as a bubbly, slightly silly and sweet teenage girl. It suits her! As the eldest of three sisters myself I really can identify with every bit about this interaction, no matter how much older than her own sisters Snowfall is. It's just a sisterly exchange, especially the little threat at the end!
(Does this mean Nightstorm and Rainpace used to be an item then? Interesting!)
Sofia Lindström
New! Entered: 2014-04-11
This was adorable! I love the interaction between the two sisters, the build up and the details of body language. It made the story very vivid emotionally.
Tessa L.
New! Entered: 2013-10-23
I adore the interactions between these two. It is very sweet. You captured the nature of the girls very well I think and I can't wait to see more of their interactions.
Emberra Owen
New! Entered: 2012-04-18
Aww this is so sweet seeing the two sisters bond especially over a boy! I really do love these stories about growing up. I also like how you've made it so the reader has no idea what she wants to talk about until she actually says it! Great job!
Holly H.
New! Entered: 2010-11-21
Aww! This was nice to see. Snowfall is enough Nightstorm's elder that she seems less like a sister and more like a second mother... but it's moments like this that give their relationship more of a sibling feel. I like that Nightstorm was able to talk to Snowfall about this delicate matter.
Lyn Cavalier
New! Entered: 2010-08-19
What a sweet little moment... little sister is so precious, and her secret... awww.
Heidi Henderson
New! Updated: 2010-08-11
Ahh, sibling relationships -- they can be jealous/critical one second, and the supportive the next! I like how you've turned a seemingly-simple interaction between two sisters into something more unexpected ;)
Melanie D.
New! Entered: 2010-08-10
Hehe what a sweet little sister to sister moment. I particular like how Snowfall is not exactly making an advice here but more offers help though listening. I like how Nightstom comes across so fierce and unsure at the same time. Very fitting a youngster I think.
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