Comments on 'Pale Treasures'

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Emberra Owen
New! Entered: 2012-01-28
Aw I think I sense a budding young romance. This was a really cute story to read. I really enjoyed seeing the interaction between the two boys, without Crackle or Fadestar. It was nice to see what they do alone, and it was good to see Newt notice Otter's behavior. I really enjoyed the story! :)
Sofia Lindström
New! Entered: 2011-06-23
I love the subtle hints at a budding romantic interest! And the title made me grin XD
Holly H.
New! Entered: 2010-11-21
It's great to see this as the start of a deepening relationship between Otter and Newt -- it really helps to give us the sense of the two of them having grown up a lot over the time-jump. Can't wait to see where this goes!
Beth K.
New! Entered: 2010-10-24
Hehe cute. I love seeing Newt and Otter have a little alone time. I wonder if pearls will start showing up in Newt's wardrobe now... *grins*
Lyn Cavalier
New! Entered: 2010-10-15
Poor Newt... and Otter.
The intro was so lighthearted and fun, and the confusing moment was so REAL. :) It's nice to see how relationships start to change...
Heidi Henderson
New! Entered: 2010-08-11
As others have said, I think you did a really good job at portraying Otter's slightly more grown-up look at the pair's relationship and Newt's naivete.
Megan McCarthy
New! Entered: 2010-07-29
Oooh, interesting! I have to say that I never expected these two to develop a romantic interest in each other, but the way you've written it makes it seem completely natural. I'll definitely be interested to see where this goes - the two of them make such an odd, yet adorable pairing.
Hannah Bochart
New! Entered: 2010-07-27
Oh, i really like this. I love how you can see the age difference taking effect. Otter is just getting into that terrible and joyful place where things begin to change, whereas Newt still sees everything in buddy-ol-pal terms. I love Newt's confusion, the "what did I do wrong" moment was great. Oh, I do hope he figures it out soon :)
Mareike Heilemann
New! Entered: 2010-07-27
Heh, cute! I really love having a closer look at the relationship between those two and how it's evolving - seems as if Otter is unsure which way it could go while Newt is pretty much unsuspecting and puzzled :p. Great portrayal of the two boys, Mike!
Peggy B.
New! Entered: 2010-07-27
Aaaawww, the young! ;) Very nice capture of the new and confusing, emotional experiences of the youth.
Melanie D.
New! Entered: 2010-07-27
I told you before, Mike :D I Love this story ^^ Otter and Newt are both utterly adorable here. I like the thoughtful side of Newt and yet he's open minded... I think that fits him very well. I also like it that it is not really clear or written what Otter thinks and feel and so the reader only can guess his intention. ^^

I enjoyed it very much :D Thanks!
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