Comments on 'Something in the Air'

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Emberra Owen
New! Entered: 2015-01-26
This story is quite interesting. I enjoyed seeing it from this particular POV, definitely a very close one to Brightwood.

I also really liked this for the good view of what the Now of wolf thought is like. It was so sad at the end seeing him go back to the den trees and then Cloudfern finding him. :(
Joanne P.
New! Entered: 2012-03-08
This is wonderfully written and beautifully sad. I think most of the times the wolves kind of fade into the background as pets or mounts, and this does a great job of showing the sense of devotion they might have to their elf-friends and why. I love how he was turned away from his journey out to the forest to spend his last moments with his long-forgotten love.
Razzle C.
New! Entered: 2011-09-20
Absolutely amazing! You did an awesome job. For one thing, you totally succeeded at making scent the primary sense in this story, rather than sight, without forgetting the other four senses. The way Tailchaser was going after the humans in the attack on their camp was also a pretty powerful reminder of how wolves really are wild animals, and also was a great success at portraying his shared fury and fear with the other wolves and elves on behalf of the captives. I love how you stayed true to the perspective by not using any of the elves' names, and using instead wolf-concept names for them like "mate-elf" and "brother-cub". It kept me very firmly and solidly entrenched in the story.

On a less technical and more emotional level, I also had to take a break in the last section. My family had a rescue cat that was *very* old and had been through a lot, and one winter morning she went and stood with her nose by the front door as if she wanted to go lie out there and quietly go to sleep for good -- that's when we knew it was time to take her to the vet. So it definitely brought back that memory very fresh and raw for me! (Which also means you did it exactly right.) I also agree, the way you made Tailchaser a full-fledged, three dimensional, sympathetic and dynamic character from birth to death, was jaw-dropping. I was especially deeply touched by his loyalty in the end, even through the lack of a more sophistocated memory. Not to mention his loyalty in the interrim to his other bond. Very true to the nature of an animal! This is one of the best wolf-bond stories I have *ever* read, and I don't just mean on this site.
Lyn Cavalier
New! Entered: 2011-07-27
This is probably one of the most touching stories written... I can't say enough for how powerful it is.... I like that, although wolves live in the Now, at the time of death, there's a momentary lapse of the Now with a powerful memory, and a dream of a scent of one loved.
Megan McCarthy
New! Entered: 2011-07-25
Writing a whole story from a wolf's point of view is a challenge, but you've pulled it off and then some. This story was a tearjerker for sure, but somehow you also made it seem uplifting at the end with reassurance that life in the Holt goes on even though one life stops.
Sofia Lindström
New! Updated: 2012-03-02
If bond-friends with personality is gold, then this story is made of diamonds! Tailchaser remained a wolf all the way through and you made him so very interesting and sympathetic - the ending scene was both beautiful and sad, making the story "whole", so to speak.
Whitney Ware
New! Entered: 2011-06-17
I've read this fic three times now, and all three times, you've left me sobbing at the end of it. And I don't doubt that you'll have me in tears again, the next time I give myself this fic as a treat.
Vicki Stephenson
New! Entered: 2010-07-30
Honest to the High Ones, that is one of the most powerful stories I've ever read. I had to stop towards the end and take a break. I used up at least five tissues. Thank you for that wonderful, heart-breaking story!
Holly H.
New! Entered: 2010-07-24
I'm so glad you picked up on Tailchaser's story and let us have a look at the rest of his life! It was lovely to see that he remembered something of Brightwood at the very end.
Mareike Heilemann
New! Entered: 2010-07-23
Oh, this was so touching - I loved seeing these events through such a different point of view, and it's great how it ties into Cloudfern's bond with Tailchaser and how it went full circle at the end with him remembering his first bond. It was very sweet that it ended on such a hopeful note, too.
Heidi Henderson
New! Entered: 2010-07-21
I really appreciate the story's coming full-circle. I found that to be very satisfying as a reader. It was also very nice to get another look, from this different POV, at the events that happened in both CF and BW's past.
Hannah Bochart
New! Entered: 2010-07-18
Just a quick note: This was partly inspired by an experience of my own. My grandmother passed away this spring, and my mother sent me a giant box of her things, just odds and ends, her 1940s radio dramas on tape, her beading materials, her feather collection, etc. One thing that stood out was this goofy "Sherlock Holmes" deerstalker cap. I grabbed it and caught this faint, dusty, desert-y, smokey smell that summed up everything my grandma had been. It brought back memories I didn't even know I had.

So, they say that smell is the sense most closely related to memory. What better way for a dying wolf to transcend the "Now" of wolf thought?
Melanie D.
New! Entered: 2010-07-16
This was an interesting POV for Brightwood's wrapping. The last scene almost made me cry. Wolf or not I loved it that Tailchaser remembered enough. The flash in the end of the two first time cuts were an awesome touch.

And hell I felt with Cloudfern and I love the last line. It made the whole story so... "The world keeps turning"

Lovely work!
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