Comments on 'Sounds and Silence'
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New! Entered: 2015-01-28
|Oh neat, a story of Axehand's injury through the eyes of his wolf friend, very creative. I enjoyed the short thoughts the wolf has, you can really feel that she is in the middle of the hunt.|
New! Entered: 2012-02-26
|Wow! I love the unique writing style of narration here! And it took me a bit to catch on, but now that I have I must say I simply adore how you used "shows x y and z" for sending! ^_^ I have to add my voice to the others saying, I love the Axehand "says many strange things" -- LOL! Using wolf POV for this incident was brilliant. This was very immediate, very wolf, very right. I love how Traptease is very wolflike in thought, yet you can see she's a WOLFRIDER wolf, with that elfin edge to her mind. :)|
New! Entered: 2011-11-03
|This entire story is so evocative; your fractured line structuring really, really works well here. My favorite line has to be "Trembling ground touches paws." I love the sense of motion and sheer joy in movement that provides!|
New! Entered: 2011-07-26
|It was an interesting choice to write this story in Axehand's wolf's point of view. You can really feel the wolf's anxiety and urgency, moreso because he doesn't really know what's going on with his elf-friend, and then his joy when he sees others coming to help. Quite a creative and interesting story!|
New! Entered: 2011-06-21
|As others already have said, Traptease's POV was very convincing and flowed easily. Even though it was a little jumbled I had no trouble following what was happening. Very well written and an interesting way of showing One-Leg's accident!|
New! Entered: 2011-06-16
|Others have said it, but this is a brilliant POV and so well-written! I lobe the "many strange things" is a fantastic description of One-Leg's colorful vocab. This is a great way to show us what happened at that pivotal moment.|
New! Entered: 2010-07-24
|I like that you chose this unusual POV to show this key moment in One-Leg's life -- the chaos of it is very appropriate. Really good job with the wolf POV, too.|
New! Entered: 2010-07-21
|I really like your handling of the POV here, Chris. I think this is a very effective portrayal of wolfish-ness :)|
New! Entered: 2010-07-15
|Ooo, I like this very much! You've done a very unique and interesting job with portraying the thought processes of a wolf. I like the repetitive, almost lyrical way in which it was told, as though the wolf only had a few ways of expressing so many different emotions and ideas.|
And yes, "Axehand says many strange things" was brilliant!
New! Entered: 2010-07-13
|What a really interesting PoV! I really liked the 'choppyness' of it - very wolf!|
New! Entered: 2010-07-11
|For some reason I really like the time specification in the start. It just makes it so .. round! |
That was impressive Chris. The POV is so unique and I like how you caught the "Now" in this story. I really went from moment to moment and everything seems so .. confusing and ominous and still clear and simple.
I also really liked the feel of the wolfs bound here. And the last sentence.
New! Entered: 2010-07-10
|Wow, great narrator's voice, Chris! Really good work at conveying the action through the wolf's eyes :).|
And "Axehand says many strange things" made me laugh because I can just imagine what kind of strange things those are XD.