Comments on 'Harmony'

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Beth K.
New! Entered: 2014-08-04
The dynamics between the cubs are wonderful here! I really like how each shines with their own personality, and the way they talk really reinforces that. I was really cheering for Fadestar to bond here (even though I know her storyline...)! I'm really glad she doesn't take the lack of bond too harshly; with a slightly different outlook she could have easily ended up sulking that none of them wanted her - even if she wasn't chased away. Good to see her strength come out after her initial reluctance!
Sofia Lindström
New! Entered: 2012-12-30
Fadestar facing her fear was a very interesting read. I like that she didn't bond with any of the wolves; made it feel more real, somehow.
Megan McCarthy
New! Entered: 2012-11-09
I like how this story shows that even healing physically sometimes cannot heal emotional/mental scars. I also really enjoy seeing this dynamic between Fadestar, Kestrel and Snowfall - they really seem like a comfortable family. I'm glad that even though Fadestar didn't end up bonding, you decided to go with an uplifting ending :)
Lyn Cavalier
New! Entered: 2011-07-27
I'm glad to see glimpses into how, althoug she's healed physically, there are emotional and mental scars to be healed as well... and that the time before she was wrapped is still very close to Fadestar, at least mentally. It's hard to overcome what she learned in a lifetime... I'm glad that you're showing the progression and that it's not too fast.
Holly H.
New! Entered: 2010-07-24
I can feel for Fadestar here to the extent that she has definitely been "once burned, twice shy" by the wolves in the past. Her caution is understandable, and it makes sense that she isn't so quick to believe how much her life has changed now that she's woken up and has been healed. It makes sense that that's a long process.
Heidi Henderson
New! Entered: 2010-07-21
I see interesting things developing between Fadestar and Crackle as the years progress. This story makes me curious as to what that could be ;)
Trena Driessen
New! Entered: 2010-07-13
Very nice Linda, you have such a way with the Fadestar/Crackle dynamic!
Hannah Bochart
New! Entered: 2010-07-08
Effortlessly done! I like how you chose not to give us the perfect, happy ending I'm sure most of us wanted: Fadestar overcomes her fear and finds a wolf-friend in one fell swoop. Instead we are treated to a real life scenario where good things come in small doses and a happy ending is something to work hard for. I like Fadestar's resolve at the end to keep her chin up and look forward.
Mareike Heilemann
New! Entered: 2010-07-08
Good to see it up :)!

I agree with Mel, you can feel with Fadestar but at the same time you just would like to shake her XD. I'm glad that she overcame her fears in the end, though :). And I really liked seeing Kestrel and Snowfall taking care of her and encouraging her!
Melanie D.
New! Entered: 2010-07-05
Ahh good to see this one up ^^
I'm torn between "Poor Fadestar" and "Oi, Fadestar". I like that you are so brave to not show your character in the best light here and how she had to be "tricked" into overcoming her fears. I like it how it shows how different the youngsters are. Each deals with their problems on their own. I loved how in the end Crackle gave her a "Get to know the wolfpack" tour XD
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