Comments on 'True Stories'

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Sofia Lindström
New! Entered: 2012-12-30
“If we hear it from Notch it’s not true."

Best line ever XD This story was very interesting. I've been wondering what plan the adults had for dealing with how Crackle scares herself with her stories. Wonderful intervention and solution!
Lyn Cavalier
New! Entered: 2010-10-15
Oh, how this makes me admire Snowfall even more. She did such a great job helping Crackle to learn here... and it's a pleasure to watch Crackle develop! Thank you for the way you wove this!
Sarah Clawfoot
New! Entered: 2010-09-09
I always love Crackle stories, and I love watching her grow up, both gradually and so... decisively. :) She's both little and big here, and I love that.
Holly H.
New! Entered: 2010-07-24
It was great to see some consequences for Crackle coming out of "Shadowplay", and I really liked the detail that, out of the cubs' hearing, it caused some heated words between uncle and niece! :) It shows what ripples can be set off in the tribe. I also liked seeing how this addressed the dark side of Crackle's imagination... and also hinted at the fact that while it's possible to let cubs run wild for a while, eventually, they need to be drawn back in and start figuring out their place in the tribe. It's good to see the adults who are best suited to it step up to cultivate a new talent.
Heidi Henderson
New! Entered: 2010-07-21
What I really like about this story is how it shows dynamics of the tribe that might normally be overlooked. Note that it's not Crackle's parents speaking to her here, but rather another tribemate. It shows how close-knit the tribe is and how each of them really do watch out for others, whether they are close family or not. Nice to see.
Trena Driessen
New! Entered: 2010-06-27
Yay! I'm happy to see Crackle growing up! I was a little surprised at the conclusion but then .. not surprised at all either! I hope that we see more interaction with her and Moss!
Linda Aarts
New! Entered: 2010-06-20
Crackle never seizes to amaze me. I hadn't thought the Shadowplay story would have so many consequences with families arguing!

I love how Crackle is developing and that she manages to scare herself, but even though the scariness she remains true to what she believes. These stories giving insight into why she thinks what she thinks are wonderful.

Also loved how you put down Snowfall, who tries to place herself in the cub while trying to reach out for her. I think Crackle as storyteller-apprentice will make for a lot of good stories :)
Mareike Heilemann
New! Entered: 2010-06-20
I'm happy to see this up! It's great seeing Snowfall as a teacher, and I really liked how Moss and she found a strategy to offer Crackle a chance without even talking about it! And the image with the tree is wonderful :).

As an aside, what I really liked was that True Edge had fought with Windsong! We know that family is extremely important for him, and that he is fighting with his niece about Crackle shows how much he feels that Fadestar is a part of it. I like that a lot :).
Hannah Bochart
New! Entered: 2010-06-19
I constantly find myself reevaluating Crackle as a character. There are times when she seems like your average adorable tomboy, there are times when she seems like just a little oddball, but then there are those delicious times when she turns around and shows off all of the many unexpected layer that make her who she is. This story is one of those times.

I love how Crackle never seems like a completely safe character. There is something about her that sets you on edge, even at her young age she's a bit... different. She is a bit too clever, a bit too cold, a bit too analytical for her to be just another cub, and I love it!

I am so happy to see her finally rising to the challenge of taking a hold of her talents and aiming them toward her future. Moss is overjoyed to see his little friend blossoming! Both he and I can't wait to see her in action as a young woman!
Melanie D.
New! Entered: 2010-06-19
Well that was a interesting story. I kinda like how Snowfall managed to get through to Crackle here even if the girl sense what she's doing.
And I really like the picture of the "true" stories. I'm a big fan of "That makes sense" XD As always Joan. A really well written story.
I'm glad to see Crackle finding her place :)
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