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Peggy B.
New! Entered: 2012-12-28
Hah, "bottle"-feeding for elves! How clever! But well, it was Suddendusk who came up with it... of course it is clever! ;)
I liked how you managed that Quick Fang does not slip into the role of a bad mother here by wishing for some freedom and loneliness. Her nearly painfully need for that is very believably described.
Razzle C.
New! Entered: 2012-12-26
Ooh, nicely written! I'm glad you DID send this in, Lyn! :D *thinks* I'd have to say, it probably takes a wolfrider cub considerably *longer* to wean than a wolf cub, so I can definitely understand how Quick Fang could get to the point where she's had enough of no-hunting. Also, the way I read this, it had at least as much to do with needing introvert-time as needing hunt-and-kill-and-feed-time. Something that might be in short supply in a crowded holt! ;) I love Suddendusk's ingenuity here, and the closeness of their Recognition (while not being mates) that this story shows!
Megan McCarthy
New! Entered: 2011-08-09
This is an interesting idea, to be sure. I can see how Quick Fang would feel trapped by her sudden family when she's used to being free to do as she pleases. I agree it might not be her wolfiness that's causing it, it's just the change in her life that she might not have been ready for. I'm surprised no one has ever seen leaked milk and thought of saving it before this.
Holly H.
New! Entered: 2010-07-24
Yeah, what I liked most about this is that it touched on Suddendusk's creativity and invention. But I also like that it could have unintended consequences for the elves, should they try it more often; it would be interesting to see that explored.
Lyn Cavalier
New! Entered: 2010-07-20
I really really hope this doesn't set any precedent regarding breastfeeding vs. bottle feeding. Breastfeeding is healthier and safer (see Whit's germ theory comment). And I agree... this is not all channeling, QF's wolfiness. I actually had this written for almost a year before I posted to SAT b/c I wrestled w/ it. I think the idea of QF wanting to hunt, though, even though she wanted to be there for Rill, overrode. I even wonder if, after this one time, she decides she's had her hunt, and will wait.
Kyna Hansen
New! Entered: 2010-06-04
How applicable this is to ME! I'm nursing a 2 month old at the moment, and sometimes you just really need that time off. I've enjoyed Quick Fang's character from the beginning, but in this story I can really feel a connection to her. An unusual and interesting topic too. :)
Whitney Ware
New! Updated: 2010-06-04
As always, Lyn, your writing is a joy to read! I do want to challenge folks to -consider- this precedent, however. The tribe has never bottle-fed elf babies before. I know that in our society today, WE take bottle feeding for granted! (In fact, in many places, breastfeeding is considered abnormal -- seeesh!) However, for our wolfriders, choosing convenience over the natural Way of things in terms of child care... this really is a big precedent. I would question whether the average member of the tribe would be comfortable with this; I think they'd consider Quick Fang extremely selfish here, to be putting her extreme need for freedom over the needs of a nursing infant. (Mother wolves are extremely focused on their young -- they don't desire 'freedom' from their cubs until the cubs are ready to be weaned, so Quick Fang isn't channeling her wolfiness here) Likewise -- as clever as Suddendusk may be, he's got no idea about germ theory, and the lack of sterilization for those milk bowls, nursing bottle & horn nipple could be very dangerous for the baby! So again -- while WE take this kind of technology for granted, it's a pretty radical development for the elves, socially...
Mareike Heilemann
New! Entered: 2010-06-04
What I find interesting in this is that we see Quick Fang being somewhat less forceful about her needs as she has been in the past. I'm not sure what that means yet - if having Rill and her relationship with Suddendusk has mellowed her a bit, perhaps, but anyway, I found it remarkable :).

It's a great piece showing their characters very well, Lyn!
Melanie D.
New! Entered: 2010-06-04
Aww :) Mommy time away. I know from my sister how important that is to keep the stress from the baby XD Good Suddenduk has such a smart mind and could give her this time. Very nice story Lyn. I like the idea of daddy takes care .. very modern .. no wait even more modern than we have at the moment XD

Great characteristic here :) For both QuickFang and Suddendusk :)
Heidi Henderson
New! Entered: 2010-06-04
It's neat that this highlights Suddendusk's crafty/creative side. He shows he cares in a very unconventional way ;)
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