Comments on 'Finding One's Balance'

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Ingrid G.
New! Updated: 2016-04-22
It's nice for Evervale, really still a cub, be viewed as a full fledged adult, and Pathmark being so proud of her! And the contrast between him and Farscout is well portrayed. I almost feel that Farscout represents Pathmark in the future!
Holly H.
New! Entered: 2010-07-05
Nice little character-study here, and it's great to see Pathmark get the spotlight more or less on his own.
Lyn Cavalier
New! Entered: 2010-06-09
This was such a fun read. Pathmark is so sweet! And I love how we see a slip from the general optimism, but how he gets it back so quickly. And wow... you did really well with Farscout...
Heidi Henderson
New! Updated: 2010-06-03
I like seeing Pathmark in action here! And I agree with what the others said - you nailed his characterization here :)
Melanie D.
New! Entered: 2010-06-03
Sweet, sweet Pathmark. I like this very much. He's such a sweet one, isn't he? His worry for Evervale is very touching. And I agree I like how you showed Farscout's personality in a few lines. Very strong and powerful.

The last line I like very much. It somehow shows he's ready to focus now .. and trust in Evervale and that they are both needed in the tribe... Nope.. I can't explain it :P
Mareike Heilemann
New! Entered: 2010-06-03
Yay, more Pathmark! And aww, this was adorable :). I think you managed to nail him, and I especially liked how you contrasted him against Farscout - and how Farscout's character comes through so clearly only through the few lines he has.
Megan McCarthy
New! Entered: 2010-06-02
I'm so happy to see Pathmark featured in a story! We really don't see enough of him, and you definitely got his personality down pat :)
Hannah Bochart
New! Entered: 2010-06-02
Thank you so much for giving Pathmark a voice. I love his character so much , but we really could see more of his side of things. He's such a sweet, good guy. I love the pride he takes in his lovemate, and the eagerness and apprehensions he feels at learning at Farscout's elbow.
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