Comments on 'Shaping a New Home'

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Beth K.
New! Entered: 2015-11-18
This is a really powerful story. I felt like crying along with Brightwood when the weight of the reality hit her. You managed to weave in so much warmth and memories though, and seeing her encounter old and new faces was a really satisfying way to end it. This gives a really large sense of movement for her character, she's managing well over the obstacles that others have stumbled on coming out of wrapstuff.
Whitney Ware
New! Entered: 2012-02-20
My intentions with this fic were pretty simple: I wanted to show Brightwood as taking ahold of life with both hands. Most of the story arcs we've seen for other characters waking up from wrapstuff have been pretty seeped in the trauma of the experience (understandably so!). I want to take the opposite approach for Brightwood. I wanted to portray her as having the attitude that "Hell, I've already lost out on a few centuries of life, I'm not about to lose another day!" Big applause for Rachel here -- thanks for creating this wonderful tough cookie of a character, and for allowing me to play with her!
Sofia Lindström
New! Entered: 2011-06-23
This story truly reflects what a vibrant and alive elf Brightwood is. It was interesting to follow her making peace with the new world she's woken up to, always with Farscout as steady support, and it's nice to see her weak moments and sorrow, as well as her will to overcome them.
Holly H.
New! Entered: 2010-07-05
I know you worried that this story would be too long, but trust me, it was gripping to read. I think much of that is because after all this time anticipating her, it's just still so interesting to read about Brightwood in the here and now. The funny thing is that it's quickly starting to feel like she's always been here -- it's almost hard to remember what the tribe was like without her. ;-) My favorite part here, as I think I said before, is seeing her reacting to those old friends she knows, changed by all the years she's missed. (I have a real storytelling-kink for getting to see familiar characters through new eyes.)
Vicki Stephenson
New! Entered: 2010-07-01
I love Brightwood! She's well on her way to becoming a favorite character! This story was truly beautiful. It had me crying several times. It's so touching to see how Brightwood struggles to deal with the loss and changes, with Farscout by her side all along.
Mike H.
New! Entered: 2010-05-29
Beautifully done. Like most good stories it gave me ideas for new story lines that can grow from it. It's going to be good to have Brightwood back with us.
Lyn Cavalier
New! Entered: 2010-05-29
Others have pretty much said it... it's wonderful to see Brightwood's focus and determination, alongside her grief, grieving, and the recent traumatization (for her).
I love how happy Farscout seems here.
Peggy B.
New! Entered: 2010-05-28
Brightwodd is an amazing character! And as all the others already praised: very believable emotions and actions.
In default of better words: GREAT STUFF!!!
Looking forward to reading more about Brightwood and how she mananges to find her place in the hold again.
Adrienne Willis
New! Entered: 2010-05-28
The story leaves me deeply moved
Heidi Henderson
New! Entered: 2010-05-27
As others have said, it's nice to see Farscout so happy again. It's also nice to get our first glimpses of Brightwood and how she is adjusting to changed life. I like how each of the characters who have emerged from wrapstuff have had their own, distinct reactions, and this is no exceptions. Nice job.
Mareike Heilemann
New! Entered: 2010-05-27
I really like seeing Brightwood and how she is dealing with waking up - she's so different than those before her! Very proactive and courageous :). Her shaping the new den is a great foil for her taking back her life into her own hands. But the moments of grief and trauma are well-played out and realistic, too.

And it's kinda weird to see Farscout so happy XD. But I'm happy for him, too! What I liked best was the interaction with Nightstorm, for some reason :).
Melanie D.
New! Entered: 2010-05-27
I think I like Brightwood. That was VERY well done. So full of live and atmosphere. I only can agree. The way how you dealt with the grief and the pain and how determined Brightwood is taking it and shapes her new home in more then just using her magic on the Mother Three.
It's so nice to see how different they all deal with the unwrapping. It's SO weird to see Farscaout so .. happy. Great.

I think my favorite parts where the one in the store den (it felt so familiar to me... like flipping pages in an old photo-book) and the meeting with the brothers and Blacksnake :)
Linda Aarts
New! Entered: 2010-05-27
I loved to see even though Brightwood has seemed determined to make it work after the unwrapping, she still had her moments of deep grief and regret for all that she has lost. It is not a small thing, either -- nearly all your family gone in such a gruesome way, and half the tribe doesn't remember it while it's so fresh for her.

Still, her determination didn't fail her, and I was glad to see she reconnected with the people she knew before, even though they have changed so much. The story really gave insight in Brightwood's mind, and I loved reading every bit of it.
Hannah Bochart
New! Entered: 2010-05-26
Oh, now she truly comes to life as a character! I love Brightwood's ability to get down to business and get her hands dirty with rebuilding a life for herself, despite the grief. It's really like seeing puzzle pieces finally fitting together when reading her and Farscout's interactions. How well his patient demeanor fits with her strong willed nature.

i especially love how the tragic themes of this story are dealt with in such a realistic, straightforward manner. How easily this could have slipped into melodrama, and how it soared right over that possibilty into something far better. it's wonderful to have such a vibrant character in action again, and so wonderful to see Farscout with a smile on his face again. Elegantly done, y'all.
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