Comments on 'As Tough as Leather'

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Melanie D.
New! Entered: 2011-07-07
Thank you guys for all the support here :) This one was a tough one. I think it's also my longest story till here and boy had to work a lot on this one. I'm glad how it turned out and I am glad you like it :)
Sofia Lindström
New! Entered: 2011-06-23
I could really see what different fathers Greenweave and Cloudfren make, another clue to why Beetle and Dreamflight grew up to be who they were. And Newt showing a side of himself less seen was nice :)
Holly H.
New! Entered: 2010-07-05
This was really well-done, Melanie! What I liked best about it was how it's such a realistic portrait of how tough it can be to be a parent sometimes -- and how even the sweetest, nicest child can be stubborn over things you don't expect! Newt comes off as very real, here, and I think it's great to see him be a less-than-perfect child (because all children must be, sometimes!). At the same time, I love getting to see Cloudfern drawing on his experience to realize that he has to be the "tough" parent, especially when it seems like Greenweave won't be. That too is so real, as is the part where Cloudfern realizes that Newt's disrespect (even though Newt doesn't intend it that way) has put his hackles up. I like that it shows that although both guys had been parents before, they have a slightly different fathering style. It's just a very understandable dilemma, sensitively handled.
Beth K.
New! Entered: 2010-06-01
Beautiful story! I think the emotions were really well explored; you really gave a great insight into these developing relationships. It was really easy to empathize with all the characters, with some good drama to add a bit of friction! :) They all came across very realistically!
Lyn Cavalier
New! Entered: 2010-05-29
I especially like how Cloudfern wasn't willing to "look the other way" in this, and how he did what he had to, even if it didn't make Newt happy at the time. Sometimes being a parent isn't about being *liked* all the time... but being respected. This will likely serve as a turning point for Newt and Cloudfern's relationship, and actually I can see it being a turn for the better.
Heidi Henderson
New! Entered: 2010-05-27
I agree with what has been said before -- I like how there wasn't a balance in how Newt grew to adapt to his new parents, but rather he seemed to bond more strongly to one over the others. It was nice seeing the POV of the less-acclimated parent.

(And very true to life in regards to a child being so attached to an item!)
Whitney Ware
New! Entered: 2010-05-27
It's wonderful to see Cloudfern's relationship with Newt explored like this -- it ain't always easy to be an adoptive parent, is it? Lovely work!
Mareike Heilemann
New! Entered: 2010-05-27
Yay, glad to see this one up! I agree with Linda, it's nice seeing you give us a different lookout through Cloudfern's eyes :). And it's great to see Newt interact with Cloudfern, too, since Newt seemed to bond stronger with Greenweave from the get-go. Poor Cloudfern, I felt for him that he had to be the 'bad cop' in this!

Great work again :)!
Linda Aarts
New! Entered: 2010-05-27
What is it with boys unwilling to give up their old leathers? First True Edge, now Newt... XD I read this story before, and I have to say it has cleaned up nicely. I love that you took the viewpoint of mainly Cloudfern and Greenweave, because you usually write from Newt. I'm happy Newt gave in at the very end, though!
Hannah Bochart
New! Entered: 2010-05-26
Ah, so happy to see this one up and ready to go! I love the familial interactions of this piece, and just how real Newt is. He just glows here, all of his young wisdom, childishness, and basic sorrow. So well done!
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