Comments on 'The Empty Den'

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Ingrid G.
New! Entered: 2015-10-03
Oh, I cried here! What is up with all these stories making me weepy!! LOL!! Perfect portrayal of Windburn ~ stubborn, solid, devoted, always doing what he thinks is the right thing... Liked how there were a few elves in the story Newt would recognize to draw him into the present day too!
Mareike Heilemann
New! Entered: 2011-07-31
That was a wonderful portrayal, of both Windsong and Windburn - I really liked that Windsong has the strength to show this less complimentary side of herself because it is an experience she knows can help Newt. And it is wonderful to see how much Windburn cares - the little interaction with Newt at the end was a great touch.
Sofia Lindström
New! Entered: 2011-06-30
Windsong's hurt and Windburn's good qualities as a chief were a very interesting read and very fitting story to tell poor Newt. It will be interesting to see Windburn interact with Newt after this.
Whitney Ware
New! Entered: 2011-06-08
I can't figure out what I like the most about this -- that it's such a wonderful showcase for Windsong, or that it is such a wonderful showcase OF Windburn. Your brilliant touch just says so much about each of them here.
Beth K.
New! Entered: 2010-06-07
Fantastic story! I love Windsong's choice of tale to tell Newt, it's a great way to illustrate the wolfrider way of life. It was a lovely portrayal of Windburn, and I think the way he interacts with Newt at the end promises hints that if he is chief as long as Easysinger was, he might continue to grow and change. I like it, it definitely made me see Windburn's personality and interaction with his tribesmates really take shape in my mind.
Holly H.
New! Entered: 2010-05-17
This was an excellent idea, Joan. I like how it takes Windsong, and shows her at an unflattering moment -- and how it takes Windburn and shows him applying his own style to being chief (consisting of equal parts strength and flaw, but winding up being, really, a portrait of success). I particularly liked that it showed Windburn not really trying to figure out how to be chief for Windsong by trying to imitate anyone else, which I think is the key to his success, here.
Hannah Bochart
New! Entered: 2010-05-06
I really forget how much of a mystery our chief is. He's a really tough guy to pin down, and this is a perfect way to illustrate him better. Very nicely arranged, and a very realistic portrait of a leader who, though not perfect, is the kind of person you can place your faith in.

Bravo!
Lyn Cavalier
New! Entered: 2010-05-06
I SO love Windburn in this story. How we see a side of him that's stubborn and sensitive and caring. And to see how Windsong developed her loyalty to her chief! This was touching.
Melanie D.
New! Entered: 2010-05-06
Thank you so much Joan. I really love this one. It's such a clever tale to tell Newt at that time. I really like the chraracteristic of Windburn here as well. How he finds his own way to deal and it's so nice how you get Windsong in and showing some less mature side of her.
I like how it picks up what we all know ... self-pity makes us ugly... And I really really like to see Windburn like this.
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