Comments on 'Something Missing'
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New! Updated: 2015-10-12
|It's so sad that there's now no one left from that three-mating! How bittersweet! And they all had such great personalities. No token "oh and these elves were three-mating, here are their names" this! Poor Flash, Whitestag and Fletcher!!|
New! Entered: 2015-01-29
|Aw Flash, so quick to emotional displays, and apparently quick to tear a den apart. I love how quickly and eagerly she changed her mind, though still making more of a mess of her and Whitestag's den. |
Oh and I read the second half and I got super sad. Ah One-leg you totally had a part in putting the three of them together, I love it.
New! Entered: 2014-08-02
|I'm so torn - I love seeing glimpses of these powerful personalities, but it's so sad that they're gone. Wonderful little scene, and I didn't expect the "modern times" at the end - it's really touching, and I love the image of One Leg as a prankster. You write really wonderful dialogue!|
New! Entered: 2013-01-12
|I agree with the others that it was quite a nice idea to put the "now" segment at the end of the story! I really found it great how we were dropped right in the middle of the "action" by this. The witty banter was great - but then, you really excel at this :). I liked the sense of personality you get of all three elves from this little piece - they are very different but everyone is strong in their own right. And in particular I liked how strong Fletcher came across here.|
The last sentence is especially formidable - I love it!
New! Entered: 2011-07-07
|Wow... Even without having any feeling for those three characters before, you really caught me with that fic! The end is fabulous!!! *sob*|
And I must admit I like it when the elves talk dirty! Hahaha. :D Really, never thought ribald language would fit into the EQ universe, but you tought me differently.
New! Entered: 2011-06-30
|Ah, One-Leg, I do love you. And the flashback to Flash, Whitestag and Fletcher's threemating was very sweet and sensual - I could really see how they worked together.|
New! Entered: 2011-06-22
|Yes, I'm... going to be in the corner for a bit sobbing, don't mind me.|
I think you already know that nobody writes witty back and forth banter quite like you (Flash is One-Leg's daughter, all right!), and being able to combine it with the much more intense style of the epilogue is a rare gift. You've really made me miss them here, these three, even though we barely know them. It seems like the Holt is a gloomier place without them, now.
New! Entered: 2010-05-20
|Very good storytelling... :) You make it so easy to relate to the characters who've died, and make them feel as real as the living members of the tribe.|
New! Entered: 2010-05-17
|I, too, really like how you structured this one -- dropping us in the middle of it, and then revealing later that most of it remains only inside One-Leg's head, or known only to the reader (the only true witness). Yet it also really works in the context of the Howl. You've always done such a wonderful job writing about Flash -- I really loved here how you created Whitestag and Fletcher to be equally-strong foils for her. It does make me sad that we don't have them around now... but it also makes me hope that we'll see more stories about them in the future.|
New! Updated: 2010-05-07
|I like how you told this story Chris. It's very good to see Fletcher alive and kicking and the three of them all together. *sigh* I agree with Hannah ... it's kinda bittersweet. |
The end is very nice too. I like it that the "now" time is put in the end. The idea that someone "plotted" that relationship to come out like that is quite nice ^^ It fit them. And I really like the last sentence in the "tale" *heart*
New! Entered: 2010-05-06
|Yay, at last a look at Fletcher as an individual, brilliant and vibrant in his own right rather than just the sacrificial lamb for our 'unwrapping' stories. It really makes his loss all the more bitter-sweet: Bitter in that we will not see the sweet, steady hunter again, but sweet knowing that he made the choice to join his dead loves. Very well done, especially your literary choice to put the "real-time" segment at the end rather than the beginning. A very clever tie-up to a great story.|