Comments on 'Woven, Retold'

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Ingrid G.
New! Entered: 2016-07-08
I'm having a good chuckle at the image of Starskimmer carrying CLOUDFERN away! Usually it's the males that do any comedic fiction carrying! So cute! Love how all Recognitions are a little different because it can happen ANY time!! Awkward!
Catrina L
New! Entered: 2013-02-21
I like how the tribe tells a story. I like how the other elves respond to it. Just a wonderul. Whole thing Fantastic:) cheers
Megan McCarthy
New! Entered: 2012-12-04
Quite the interesting recognition story for Cloudfern and Starskimmer! A little sad that Brightwood wasn't there to see it and her niece when she was born, but she seems mostly content with just hearing the story and experiencing it through send.
Emberra Owen
New! Entered: 2011-12-28
Aw this story makes me smile. Honestly you have to wonder if Willow had some type of sixth sense as to what would happen in the future or something.
Mareike Heilemann
New! Entered: 2011-06-26
Haha, I had to laugh at the image of Starskimmer carrying Cloudfern, with their hair all interwoven! What a sophisticated prank Willow pulled there - impressive! And so very fitting for Starskimmer and Cloudfern and their relationship, more friendship than love.

I really loved how everyone was pitching in, adding something and getting sidetracked all the time! Lovely sense of community here :).
Sofia Lindström
New! Entered: 2011-06-23
The image of Cloudfern and Starskimmer, still tangled like a broken net, rushing off to fulfill Recognition had me in stitches! Very nicely done, with a lot of humor and the faint dark undertone of the speakers' anger with Willow still intact.
Peggy B.
New! Entered: 2011-06-17
Hahahah, that one made me laugh out loud. Too funny. Greatly told.
Razzle C.
New! Entered: 2011-02-18
Ha! I love this one. Beetle seemed almost surprised to hear the reason for her cub-name -- since she matched it so well as a cub! :) I love how Brightwood, as the listener, was the glue that kept the scatterbrained tribe focused on actually TELLING her the whole story! Heheheheh.
Lyn Cavalier
New! Entered: 2010-07-20
:) Thanks, everyone! I don't know what made me keep in in the present tense instead of a flashback, but I'm glad it worked!
Holly H.
New! Entered: 2010-05-17
As I just said to Whit -- congratulations coming up with a Recognition scenario that is new and different, as well as vivid and funny! I particularly like how well it suits Starskimmer's character. :) But most of all I liked how it became a sort of community endeavor -- and how that was reflected by having so many voices tell the story at the Howl.
Hannah Bochart
New! Entered: 2010-05-06
Oh, what a fun read! Your writing style has such a wonderful, relaxed yet sophisticated feel. I love your choice not to jump into a flashback, as I think would have been my instinct, but rather to let the entire tribe share the story. All of the voices blending together, I love how everyone had a little something to share.

I especially find it interesting how Willow is somewhat responsible for instigating the creation of her current lovemate. A very clever, romantic choice!

Very well done, I simply love it.
Melanie D.
New! Entered: 2010-05-06
I like how that story is told by so many elves. It feels very real that everyone who was involved want to get a say in. And how they get side tracked all the time. Very nice and ... what a Recognition :D It really fits them. And Beetle.

What I also like here is that Cloudfern can tell the story with Willow in it and pushing his grudge aside for a moment. It gives one hope that one day he'll be able to forgive Willow.

Odd enough what I like the best about this story is that not the story that's told is ion the foreground but that's a story about how the tribe tells a story to Brightwood.
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