Comments on 'Red Skies at Night'

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Beth K.
New! Entered: 2014-08-16
The poem is a beautiful way to recall the event; and I like to think of it from Kestrel's point of view in that it's an emotional tragedy, and also a warning for the future hunters to watch for those signs they ignored that day.
Razzle C.
New! Entered: 2012-12-14
From the very first line, this poem beats out a warning feel to the reader! Poor Kestrel, and yet I admire that she did not give up on Bearheart. I like that you didn't just have her dart down and easily pluck him out of harm's way. I can very clearly imagine this being sung/told by Kestrel on a red-skied night to the tribe, for the benefit of its younger members, while the beat is pounded out on drum for her. Very dramatic, and the rhythm stayed true for the poem's duration!
Lea R.
New! Entered: 2012-08-14
It's a very good written poem, I love the rhythm of it, you can see how it must be sung or told at the howl. But how sad, especially for Kestrel, who was only able to rescue one of her friends! I wonder what impact this event had on the tribe...
Megan McCarthy
New! Entered: 2012-08-09
The thing I find the most interesting about this poem is that it almost reads like a story - it's very suspenseful and I found myself reading quickly to find out what happens next. This must have taken a lot of thought, and the result is something amazingly pretty and sad.
Peggy B.
New! Entered: 2012-08-09
Oh my, this is a situation no one wants to be in: if you can rescue only one of a group of friends or family members in severe danger, which one do you choose?... Poor Kestrel! But I admire that she based her decision on pure logic.
Very dramatically written!
Whitney Ware
New! Entered: 2012-08-08
Whenever I read this one, I've always imagined it put to music, with Moss's clear voice doing the singing and his fingers on Heartsong's strings.
Sofia Lindström
New! Entered: 2012-05-05
The wording and flow of the poem, combined with the clear pain and regret Kestrel experienced, was heartbreaking and breath-taking.
Emberra Owen
New! Entered: 2012-01-13
This makes me so sad. To see this from Kestrel's point of view. Seeing the hunting party, her friends taken away and being helpless to do anything. It makes me so sad. Though it was really well written.
Melanie D.
New! Entered: 2011-07-08
Poor Kestrel she has witnessed a lot of death in her life first handed. :(

Otherwise. I can only agree. I totally love and I'm utterly impressed how you managed to tell this story in a poem! Love this. It had a very tight atmosphere and somehow I can't imagine it anymore being told other then this!
Mareike Heilemann
New! Entered: 2011-06-26
I'm impressed that you managed to tell such a gripping tale in a poem! It had a great atmosphere, really building up on the sense of dread. Poor Kestrel and Bearheart, having to watch helplessly as the others are swept away ... And I loved how you picked up the warning from the beginning at the end, changing it to include the event.
Lyn Cavalier
New! Entered: 2010-06-09
This is such a sad tale... I agree with Holly about the setup... it builds the feeling of crisis, and loss. I like the tale from Kestrel's POV, and how we sense her feeling of desparation and not being able to do more.
Holly H.
New! Entered: 2010-05-17
Great job with this -- I liked how the rhythm and meter of it, the short lines and stanzas, gave it a feeling to me of building momentum that underscored the sense of crisis. Thanks for putting this event on the map, as it were.
Vicki Stephenson
New! Entered: 2010-05-06
Beautiful and incredibly sad. It brought a tear to my eye.
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