Comments on 'The Morning After'

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Ingrid G.
New! Entered: 2015-10-16
I think Willow KNOWS what she did was wrong, but her attitude is one of saving face. But I would have smacked her if I were Windburn!! And I would think One Leg would send his thoughts to Windburn and know that criticizing the chief then was neither the time nor the place!! Just what Willow needs ~ a supporter???
Annika K.
New! Updated: 2013-07-28
Yes, the beginning of the story was really the calm before the storm, with all those sleeping elves.
I really loved seeing Windburns wolf instincts here - when he met Brightwood the first time and when he saw Willow again. I have to say, I was on the side of the chief all the time - I could feel his desperation and the big question, how he could handle the stubborn healer.
However, I loved how Pathmark showed up to support his sister not matter what is going on.
Holly H.
New! Entered: 2011-11-02
There's so much going on here, and so many things to wrangle -- fault enough to go around, but also the necessity for Windburn to act with authority, to gain control in THIS moment even if there are a host of other things that will have to be dealt with. For me, this turns on the idea of Blacksnake's at the end, to share with Willow the vivid memories that are such a huge part of the complicated view of what a healer is and what a healer should and shouldn't do, that these elders have -- the "secret" behind the scary stories about Owl... and the admission that really, they all should have just sat down and done that from the start. It probably would have scared Willow even more, but it would also have given her information that she needed to have.
Sofia Lindström
New! Entered: 2011-06-30
To see both sides of this conflict get attention and good arguments was very satisfying! Windburn hasn't been the best of chiefs, when it comes to teaching others what they can do right, as well as interacting with his tribemates in a way that could prevent stupid actions like the prank against the humans or Willow unwrapping Brightwood. Willo, on the other hand, needs to know why she's being treated as she is and stop seeing herself as merely infairly treated. I hope both of them learn something from the send sharing - must read on!
Beth K.
New! Entered: 2010-06-01
I love the beginning of this story; the calm before the storm. I really like seeing Windburn as the Chief/Protector, it's a good role for him, and fighting against his wolfish instincts was a fantastic detail. I love the image of him moving through the tree making sure that everyone is safe before moving on to Willow.

Again, the opinions brought to the table by each character seem to flawlessly project their own personalities and experiences, and really brings this challenging situation to life. This must have been a tough situation for everyone; and I like how it brought out a lot of differences in opinion before being settled!
Whitney Ware
New! Entered: 2010-04-23
This has been an absolutely fascinating storyline to me to see how how readers react to it, and the range of opinion it has generated. Seems like the general opinion may be siding with Willow in sympathy. I’ve gotta side with Windburn on this one, though: One-Leg’s argument that Chief Windburn has driven Willow to her rash behavior just doesn’t hold water to me, because while Windburn has made some communication mistakes, this is still a Wolfrider culture – Willow is responsible for her own choices and her own actions, and Windburn’s the frakkin’ CHIEF! The Holt ain’t a democracy. The chief is supposed to give orders, and since when does it matter if he’s as fair as Solomon or not?

At some point, Windburn asks himself if his mother, Easysinger, would have handled the situation with Willow any better. (Which leads me to ask -- what would Cutter himself have done differently, other than not restrain himself from smacking Willow across the face for defying him? And I certainly can’t imagine Wolfsister, Burn or Foxsly handling this situation half as well as Windburn has.) I’m sure Easysinger would have communicated with Willow in a gentler and kinder way, but do I get the impression that the end result would have been any different? Her defiant attitude here leaves me suspecting that Willow may still have gotten impatient and rushed it anyway, no matter who was in charge.

(A good question could be -- how much of One-Leg’s ire with Windburn here is One-Leg projecting his own emotional baggage into the situation? Our favorite red-headed elder does have an excellent argument, but I’m still betting that whether or not he’s aware of it, his own feelings of being trapped by his disability really feed into his challenging attitude here! )

Overall – this is just good, crunchy storytelling! It’s easy to find your opinions shift each time you re-read it, because really – everyone involved is right, and everyone involved is wrong. There’s no easy answer, and the repercussions of the incident are sure to linger for fics to come… (I just can't imagine how Willow is gonna mend fences with Farscout and Cloudfern after this...)
Lyn Cavalier
New! Entered: 2010-04-23
I really appreciated the detail in this... and I think what struck me the most was Windburn's reaction to Brightwood being a stranger... I know it's something I hadn't thought of in regard to the unwrapped elves...

I love One-Leg here, and how he stands up for Beetle. Looking at all the dynamics, it was interesting to see how OL and BS kind of changed roles some... BS is more supportive of WB here... and OL is more defiant toward the Chief.

I know that how Willow went about healing BW was wrong... and yet I hope that there will (eventually) be some recognition that OL is right in his defense of Willow, too.
Melanie D.
New! Entered: 2010-04-22
Wow... theres a lot in this. The first thing that get my attention was the feeling of "case the stranger away" in Windburn. That was .. a nice detail.

What I love the most about it is how the elves around react on Willow and Windburn. There's so much in it again. So much .. Gray. It's never Black and White... I think that's what I like the most about the whole Willow-storyline.

I have to say I didn't feel for Willow until Windburn gave the last punishment. It's going to be a hard time. Through I also understand how Windburn is at the end of his wits.
Mareike Heilemann
New! Entered: 2010-04-22
Woah, Willow is ... beyond stubborn. I can understand that Windburn is at a loss what to do. Though, I'm glad that One-Leg has spoken up for her, too - he's got a point though it wasn't the right time for it.
But the punishment is really hard, especially that she will be shunned after the sending ... I hope it works, though, and she begins to understand why everyone is so angry at her.
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