Comments on 'Second Best'

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Beth K.
New! Entered: 2014-08-04
This is such a wonderful look at these siblings! I love the way that Thornbow's mind works - it's really interesting to see how easily he can relate to Honey's feelings, despite the very, very different way they deal with those feelings in day to day life.
Megan McCarthy
New! Entered: 2011-08-05
I love the insight this story offers into Thornbow's character. As others have said, he tends to be a supporting character and as such, we don't see a lot of what he's actually thinking. It's too bad Honey's so caught up in her own problems that she doesn't really realize what a supportive brother she has. Still, she also comes off as a sympathetic character here, and you can really understand her reasoning for being so upset.
Sofia Lindström
New! Entered: 2011-06-22
Similar experiences make for different reactions in different people. This really show casts how different yet alike Honey and her brother are and makes me want to read more about them both!
Holly H.
New! Entered: 2010-05-17
I love all of the tricky undercurrents in this one -- Honey's self-absorption, but also her bottomless need for someone to *notice her*; Thornbow's self-awareness, and generosity towards his sister. And that poignant ending that acknowledges how even in the unconditional love of siblings, there's give but not always take. These two are really a fascinating family, and this makes me want to see more of them together.
Whitney Ware
New! Entered: 2010-04-23
Embarrassing but true: my entire inspiration for this song was Chris Colfer's partial rendition of "Mr. Cellophane" song from the pilot episode of "Glee". ;) Could NOT get that tenor voice out of my head.... granted, I don't imagine Thornbow as ever quite so cherubic or high-pitched, but still... strange where inspiration can strike from!
Lyn Cavalier
New! Entered: 2010-04-23
SO glad to see a story featuring this sibling pair. And I really like the glimpse of Thornbow that you gave. He's not an oft-featured character... and he deserves some attention!
Mareike Heilemann
New! Entered: 2010-04-22
Aww, in this story I really feel for both Honey and Thornbow. A lot of her situation is Honey's own making but it's still hard. And poor Thornbow - she's doing to him what she's crying about being done to her. What a pair they make, indeed!

I really loved getting a look at Thornbow and his relationship with his sister! He's been pretty overlooked so far, and it's good to see him get some spotlight.
KennelBoy on AO3
New! Entered: 2010-04-20
Oh, Honey. It really is two steps forward, one step back with that poor woman, isn't it? It's always a little painful to see someone pulling at the lips of their own wounds like that, but hopefully she'll come around.

Too bad for Thornbow, though. Understanding or not, it always stings to have someone say -- by actions if not words -- that you don't really count because you'll always be there.
Melanie D.
New! Entered: 2010-04-20
I feel for both of them and I have to say I thought exactly the same and was smriking when Thornbow said it in the end. "What a pair they make".
I really like it that through Thornbow knows it better he let his sister cry for herself. I like it very much and Honey ... as less as we all want to see it, is probably the most realistic character of all. We all love to dwell in self-pity now and then, don't we?

Great story Whit.
Hannah Bochart
New! Entered: 2010-04-19
What a wonderful portrait of two members we just don't get enough of. I've always been intrigued by Thornbow but he just kind of fades into the background most of the time. I'm so glad you addressed him and his struggle to fid a place in the tribe.

I also love this realistic look at Honey. Yes, she's a royal pain in the tail, but the hurt of being second-best is always real, even if it is partly of your own making. She is a truly sympathetic character, even if she doesn't always come off in the best light.

And of course, I am always a sucker for sibling stories. This one really made me miss my own big brother and his unquestioning protection. You really nailed it, so much so that I think I'll need to give him a call...

Bravo x 3!
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