Comments on 'Loss for Words'

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Ingrid G.
New! Entered: 2016-07-03
My favorite part was the last, when you can feel a hesitant pause in the ending's lull. Evervale sends **Rainpace** ~ AND THEN THE COCOON IS OPENED!!! OMG!! Willow, ARGH!!!
Lyn Cavalier
New! Entered: 2011-07-27
What to say on this story? It was amazing to work with Chris to bring so many different reactions into view... and a word hunt that is not successful in more than one way... :) And the first segment - where we see some of OneLeg's reactions to what's happening... WOW. :)
Melanie D.
New! Entered: 2011-06-23
Oh boy... I was almost glad when they started fighting as painful as it was. yet the silence between them was even more painful. I hate this silence so much.
Its need to look back and see how the events take an impact on the tribe as a whole. And the cliffhanger.. Oh even if I know what happened it still has me on the edge.
Great stuff!
And poor beetle. I want to hug her...
Sofia Lindström
New! Entered: 2011-06-22
One-Leg understanding Willow's plight felt very right – the tribe had been neglecting her feelings on the matter and both sides were too emotional to make any good arguments or understand each other. Evervale's reflection over the possibility of being in the same spot as Willow was fitting and the cliffhanger at the end has me deciding to put off sleep for another hour, just to read what happens!
Holly H.
New! Entered: 2010-03-24
I liked how much ground was covered here, and how it showed such a range of reactions and thoughts from even this small subset of the tribe. I expect it's a good microcosm of the general issues being worked through by others as well. And I also really liked how these thoughts and reactions were explored while other action was going on, or at least, while the elves were TRYING to engage in something else, like the word-hunt. It's good to see more of that, even if this didn't really seem to move them forward. I also liked that their distraction affected their success. Good job!
Linda Aarts
New! Entered: 2010-03-19
I liked the point of view picked here, and how several story lines continued / overlapped with the previous story of Willow opening the cocoon; basically ending with the same cliffhanger :) I especially felt for Beetle, and I wonder what happens next between them!
Heidi Henderson
New! Entered: 2010-03-08
I really liked reading this. It was a nice continuation from events we've seen before, and it was interesting to see all the different points of view that had formed out of recent events. Lots of juicy stuff there! I'm so interested to see how those POV's are going to influence future events and interactions.
Mareike Heilemann
New! Entered: 2010-03-07
Oh wow, this was almost painful, with the tension between the elves palpable. I can understand all of them - though I do think One-Leg in particular took it a bit far (almost as if he believed he had to make up not supporting her earlier by more fervour and going over the top with it).
And still, poor Beetle!

I'm looking forward to the development coming out of this!
Angie Cousins
New! Entered: 2010-03-05
Oh, wow. This was amazingly layered and so full of emotions and elves caught in their own heads. I especially liked how there was a sense of strange, precarious balance within the story - no one was more right or wrong than anyone else, no one was the victim and no one was the aggressor. Not truly.
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