Comments on 'A Long, Difficult Path'

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Ingrid G.
New! Entered: 2015-10-14
WOW! What an epic undertaking to write all this with everyone! But such a very important story to tell!! I love how the whole learning to heal process is portrayed. I could FEEL how "ARRGH!" frustrating it would be not to have your old freedoms. It would be like not being about to drive without someone going with you. Oh, and don't drive out of town!! And, it would be like not letting the medical intern do simple surgery. Or going through law school and not being able to take the BAR exam. Poor Willow!! That said, I want to throttle her right about now!!
Emberra Owen
New! Entered: 2011-11-08
Honestly, I'm almost lost for words. This seems like it was a very serious, and long undertaking. I can only imagine how long it took to write, let alone getting all the elves' personalities right along with that. There are so many emotions in this story, but each are so distinct to their respective elf. This is an amazing piece I must say.
Heidi Henderson
New! Entered: 2011-07-21
This was such a fun project to work on. It was great to get the POV of so many characters about all the situations currently at hand. It was really nice to see the impact Fletcher's situation had on the tribe as a whole.
Sofia Lindström
New! Entered: 2011-06-22
The story jumping from elf to elf made it feel big and encompassing of the whole tribe, while still clearly showing the events that Fletcher's death had been catalyst to. Very well written!

”...I need her to want to help, not just want to be right.” Farscout's words rang true for me. Yes, Willow has lost some of her cubbish freedom, as we all do when we grow up, and she should be allowed to be frustrated with that – but when it affects other people's lives and deaths she loses the confidence of others.

Willow made the healing all about herself; her tribemates' trust in her, her possible guilt when Fletcher died and was fairly quick in deciding everyone was against her. And I like that, because it's such a momentous change and she has done a lot to please others. Though her actions at the end were rash, they might have been prevented if someone had suffered her insults and kept an eye on her, at least from a bit away. In short, very interesting story!
Holly H.
New! Entered: 2010-03-24
I really appreciate the work that everybody did on this! A giant collab like this is a lot of work, and isn't something you want to do very often, but in key instances like this, it's really great to see it all come together and to get a feeling for what's going on with a large cross-section of the tribe.
Sarah Clawfoot
New! Entered: 2010-02-24
This was just phenominal! I actually read this a day or two ago, but I had to go away and... reflect for a while! No matter how this plays out, even if Willow heals Brightwood effortlessly and everything goes smoothly, I'm really not sure HOW the tribe is going to forgive her for this. This is *huge*. I'm even angry at Willow myself on the tribe's behalf! How incredibly selfish of her!

It really was a treat to see all these short vignettes of reactions across the elves. I wish I'd been able to contribute something, too. I agree that it's great to see some more depth to Notch, and the reaction of the elders, and I sympathize with poor Beetle. Cloudfern certainly has his hands full with the drama of his daughter on one hand all mixed up with the drama of his wrapstuffed sister on the other, not to mention Newt still being so new and Honey constantly snarking at him... the poor guy! He needs a vacation when everything settles down some.

This was such an emotionally-packed piece. Thank you all! This is fantastic. :)
Reyes L.
New! Entered: 2010-02-23
Wow. Just...wow. I mean, there's so much in this. As someone new to the tribe, I have to start learning about the elves of RTH and this story is a much appreciated helping hand in doing that.
Lyn Cavalier
New! Entered: 2010-02-23
This story is so complex, so well-woven.

I’m so glad that we get to see some of the inner workings of Notch’s heart and mind. Sometimes it’s easy to think of him as prankster and playboy… but here, there’s a lot more going on for him, and I’m glad we got to see it.

Honey here is fantastic! I am so glad to see her insight into herself and into her behavior. I think she’ll always be herself, but hopefully she’ll have a bigger perspective than herself.

The council scene is powerful. It was good to hear from each of the elders. And the image of Willow getting smaller and smaller in the council was so clear in my mind as I read it… Poor Willow.

It was neat to see Newt and Snowfall together, comforting one another. And later… Kestrel did a great job of reaching out to Snowfall!

Foxtail’s a lot more mature than she lets on, too! It’s interesting to see how Fletcher’s death has affected her… and to see more about her perspective on life.

Drunk True Edge and One-Leg… fantastic! I love the line about their grandchild having too big a head to pass through the birth canal. 

Blacksnake’s so reflective. I like how he focuses not on whether or not Willow needs to be able to do more, but what he might be able to do. The conclusion he comes to is fantastic! (Although Willow did already heal someone she’d never met – Newt!)

Oh… Crackle… She has quite the imagination, and she has quite the amount of abstract thinking for a cub her age. She’s amazing.

Poor Pathmark. He was hoping to help… and poor Willow. To hear what he had to say….

The cliffhanger is tense. I am looking forward to the next story! I love how Willow reaches out for Brightwood and sends to her. Oh, boy… I think there are going to be some people who are unhappy with her, successful or not.
Melanie D.
New! Entered: 2010-02-22
CLIFFHANGER!

Oh that took me quite a while but it was worth it :) It was great to see all those reactions from different elves and how it get to some to realize things. I was quite shocked to see that Honey reacted a lot more mature then Willow did here.
I love all the interaction and to see how everyone is dealing with the situation in their own way.

Through.. poor Beetle. I felt with Willow as well to a certain part but then came the time I just wanted to shake her and tell her to get over it.

I am really looking forward to see the aftermathe of this. I'm quite sure Farscout will have problems to forgive this... Cloudfern might too.

Great piece of work and it just ... ahh jabbering. Great work!
Linda Aarts
New! Entered: 2010-02-22
*gasp* Such a cliffhanger! I want to know what happens!!! XD

I loved seeing all the viewpoints; too bad I couldn't get Fadestar's in in time. But having such a broad base of people reviewing what happened was really touching. It makes everyone see that it is something that really affects the entire tribe!
Part of me felt sorry for Willow, and part of me wanted to shake her roughly for being so stubborn -- poor Beetle! I hope they will work it out.

Can't wait for the final part!
Mareike Heilemann
New! Entered: 2010-02-22
Wow, that was long and intense! Great work, everyone!

I feel for poor Willow ... But most of all for Beetle. It's a hard place to be in, with someone you love suffering and lashing out at you. It's just a horrible situation for both of them. I can understand Farscout and the others, too, though ...

I'm looking forward to see what becomes of Willow's actions now!
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