Comments on 'Too Many Tears'

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Ingrid G.
New! Entered: 2015-10-26
I think it's fitting that Honey picked the most aloof, difficult wolf in the pack! The other elves are bound to notice. After all that trouble, bringing down a deer will be easy! I loved the description of how she wanted to run away and BELONG at the same time! I hope Honey finds the "Now"!
Beth K.
New! Entered: 2012-03-18
I really enjoyed this. I think I often think of a wolf-bond as an instant, magic sort of thing that just happens, or doesn't. I like that this was written with a struggle and determination, and a very strong wolf personality to go along with it. This brought out so many different emotions, and really shows a great pattern of growth on Honey's part - from simple things like using logic and fairness to reason with Windburn and Blacksnake rather than pouting - and of course, her determination and willingness to try every different approach to breaking through to Mooncrier.
Sofia Lindström
New! Entered: 2011-06-30
Mooncrier is such a good match for Honey - someone to make her grow up ('cuse even though she's hardly the youngest elf around, she often acts it) and challenge her, without having to follow all the elfin rules of tact, politeness and being hurt by Honey's bitter tongue.
Lyn Cavalier
New! Entered: 2010-04-09
Fantastic! You make it so easy to feel for Honey. I especially liked her honesty with herself that she feels things, horrible things, toward others in her tribe. Very self-aware, and very honorable of her to try and do something so that she doesn't feel that. I think, too, that Mooncrier is an awesome wolf-friend for Honey. I think she'll teach Honey some lessons... she doesn't seem to tolerate self-pity! Maybe her wolf will call her on it more than some of the elves!
Heidi Henderson
New! Entered: 2010-02-17
I like this unexpected turn in Honey's life, and am really interested to see how she fares with this new goal and outlook.

The relationship Mooncrier and Honey have in your story is very well-written.
Whitney Ware
New! Entered: 2010-02-06
Three cheers for Honey! I'm really enjoying her slow journey toward self-discovery here. Honey seems like one of those souls for whom things can just never go easy -- but she's capable of learning and capable of changing, and that will always make her a sympathetic character, even when sometimes her motivations and choices aren't so very much. Keep up the great work!! I'm eager to see what comes next for her!
Linda Aarts
New! Entered: 2010-02-01
You know, I really like to read about Honey. She's becoming something of an anti-hero -- her persistance of convincing Mooncrier and sharing what she feels with the wolf teaches us so much of what's going on inside of her. I really hope she pulls through and that she is allowed in the hunt!

I also love how you portrayed Mooncrier. They are an interesting pair together, and I'm looking forward to see more about them :)
Holly H.
New! Entered: 2010-01-30
Yay, good for Honey! I'm glad that she finally decided to take some control of her life, and get assertive about going after what she wants. I'm really interested to see how this plays out, too -- it's going to be interesting watching her become a hunter!
Melanie D.
New! Entered: 2010-01-30
Amazing Ellen. I am impressed how well you develop Honey. She seems so ... weak and strong here at the same time. It's absolutely ... fitting. The dynamic between Mooncrier and Honey is great and it almost seems like the wolf is teaching her a very imported lesson. Fantastic!
Mike H.
New! Entered: 2010-01-29
Damned straight. Now thats a Honey story that True Edge would be behind all the way and be impressed with. I'm going to have to think of how he would react but you can bet Honey rose at least a tiny bit in his opinion...for what thats worth anyway. ;)
Trena Driessen
New! Entered: 2010-01-29
Oh wow I love this story! How persistent Honey is! And I absolutely ADORED the way that Mooncrier was portrayed! The two make a dynamic pair!
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