Comments on 'Empty'

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Lea R.
New! Entered: 2015-07-20
Uh, this is such a sad story. I had tears in my eyes at the end. It must seem really cruel for Newt that he knows his brother's soulname and never can return this gesture to him, even when he will know his own! But I liked the bit when Greenweave is just honest with Newt and doesn't tell him nice lies. It seems cruel but I think it was for the best. And I love the end. They are a step closer to a real family there.
Emberra Owen
New! Entered: 2012-01-14
This was so sad. I can't even imagine knowing but not being able to talk to them because they're dead and gone. Its also really heartwarming to see him warm up to Greenweave a little bit more in this.
Melanie D.
New! Entered: 2011-07-07
Thank you everyone for the kind words and support. I really enjoyed writing the story and taking up the soulname thing seems only natural to me since.. I think it is a big thing for an elf.
Sofia Lindström
New! Entered: 2011-06-30
The description of what happens to a soul name when its owner is dead and gone was very touching and slightly terrifying. To go from being a description of one's soul, to being an meaningless word is quite a big step and really emphasizes the fact that the person in question is dead. Very well written!
Mareike Heilemann
New! Entered: 2011-06-25
I'm just realising that there are quite some of your stories I haven't commented on - I'm sorry 0_o.

That said: I really love that you picked up on Tossfur giving him his soul name and what it means now that he is gone. It's so painful to know that he never got to return the gesture - or at least tell his brother how much it meant to him. But I loved seeing Greenweave reach out to him and how they start forming a bond through sharing their grief. I also really liked seeing highlighted the differences and similarities Newt sees in Greenweave compared to Tossfur - I'm not sure if it makes it easier or harder for Newt, though, that Greenweave is very similar to his father.
Lyn Cavalier
New! Entered: 2010-02-25
This was touching. Newt's sense of loss is tangible for him here, but it's neat to see how it weaves into Greenweave's loss.
Heidi Henderson
New! Entered: 2010-02-17
It's interesting to see more of what's going through Newt's mind as he tries to fit into a new place and time -- still seems like his past keeps coming back to haunt him, and I'm sure it will for quite some time.
Whitney Ware
New! Entered: 2010-02-09
I'm really glad to see more of Newt's developing relationships now that he's out of wrapstuff. His heartache, and Greenweave's gentle way of answering it, is just so touching!
Holly H.
New! Entered: 2010-01-30
I'm really glad to see you pick up on that gesture and show how it affects Newt! It wouldn't be an easy thing for a wolfrider to deal with, and this story explored that very well. I also like how it continues to create this poignant link between Newt and Greenweave through their mutual love for Tossfur, even though they knew him in such different ways.
Angie Cousins
New! Entered: 2010-01-27
It's wonderful the amount of emotion you packed into this story. It said as much in the quiet moments as it did when the dialogue started. It's a painful, sobering thought - realizing that Newt had his brother's soul-name but could never return such a generous, important gift.
Linda Aarts
New! Entered: 2010-01-27
Aww, that is so sad. Poor Newt, I feel for the lad! Greenweave handled that pretty well; as far as I can see, the two of them will develop a comfy bond.
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