Comments on 'Memories in the Snow'
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New! Entered: 2016-05-01
|Evervale really is still a young elf. I would get way too excited about stuff like snow when I was in my twenties. The "elders" in her den just have to put up with her! LOL|
New! Entered: 2014-04-16
|This story reminded me of how much I love snow (as well as how sad I was that Sweden got close to zero snowfall this year for some reason). You really captured that magical feeling of a snow storm, how wonderful it is to look out and see everything covered by pure white. It was also nice to get a look at Evervale's likes and happy memories. Her poor lovemates, I bet they'll be exhausted and cold before next sunrise.|
New! Entered: 2013-09-10
|Thats lovely, I really can imagine the snow blanket you described. Its so nice to read some everday-moment of those three, and so sweet how Evervale described them as her new family. I love the ending of the story, with this : one of her happy memories in the snow :)|
I could really imagine, Pathmark and Longshot playing with Evervale and her younger siblings in the snow- there could be a new story.
New! Entered: 2012-12-29
|You created very vivid pictures here, Mike! I felt transfered back in time myself. Who did not look in wonder at freshly fallen, pure, undisturbed blankets of snow as a child? And who doesn't do it still?|
New! Entered: 2012-12-26
|*contented sigh* That was lovely! I remember playing in snowdrifts taller than I was when *I* was a cub -- er, kid. ;) I love the beautiful flow of this story. It's so sweet! And how Evervale is remembering other snow days, but you show so smoothly the wolf-blood making her earlier memories fuzzy and distant. I loved the resignation of her lovemates to her cub-like eagerness to play in the snow, too! ;) You really brought this threemating to life for me, in this story.|
New! Entered: 2012-03-11
|Lovely story - I like that you've include her blood family and her new family, and the memories that the snow triggers in her. I feel like maybe the snow is a bit like Evervale herself - the calm, quite, beauty of it anyways (I wonder if she has a howling blizzard in her too? ;)|
New! Entered: 2011-09-04
|How wonderful! Though I don't like winters, I can understand Evervales enthusiasm for the first snow and the want to play in it. Very nice written!|
New! Entered: 2011-06-18
|As someone from a country without snow, this really made me fantasize - imagining the feel of the storm and really, really understanding Evervale's eagerness. It's so lovely to have these glimpses into the everyday of the elves' world, their lives right in the midst of nature - it makes that world feel so real.|
New! Entered: 2010-10-15
|:) I *love* snow, too... and especially watching it fall, and seeing the untouched blanket that covers the world. :) Good to see the sense of Balance that Evervale has between her lovemates and her family!|
New! Entered: 2010-01-13
|Wonderful! This left me yearning for a morning of perfect snow... (we live in the part of the country that almost never sees it!)|
New! Entered: 2010-01-11
|Very cozy and evocative snapshot of these three! It's so easy to identify with Evervale -- I love watching snow, too, and thinking about the innocence of earlier memories when it was something to enjoy in an uncomplicated way. And there's no better view of a snowstorm than from inside where it's warm and safe, eh?|
New! Entered: 2010-01-10
|LOL, Evervale is like me! I LOVE being the first one to break the serenity of a white snow-blanket :-)|
New! Entered: 2010-01-10
|Ohhh how fitting. I can watch out of my window at the moment and have the same view as Evervale. The world is covered in white deep snow here as well. |
I do like how you manage to give both important groups of elves in Evervale's life here. Her lovemates and her younger siblings. It's heartwarming how she remembers happy things and even more how she's already looking forward to how they will rememberer. It just points out what a loving and sweet person she is.
New! Entered: 2010-01-09
|Aww, this was very sweet. I remember the magic of freshly fallen snow, too :). I'm not sure what I like more about this story, that it shows Evervale with her lovemates (the threemating has gone a bit unnoticed compared to some other fresh pairings) or that it shows how close Evervale and Crackle are and that Rill is becoming integrated into the family, too!|