Comments on 'Falling Stars'

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Lea R.
New! Entered: 2014-09-25
"Those owls are not what they seem", I nearly cracked up at this sentence. (Yes, I remember Twin Peaks) And now I wonder how the story would have ended, unfair!

The story itself is cute and a bit bittersweet. Fadestar's ritual with the waving is sweet and I like that even if she knows that it isn't her mother's spirit, she'll do it anyway. Oh, and Crackle. You should be very, very glad, that you don't have anyone to wave to...
Sofia Lindström
New! Entered: 2012-12-30
Such a bittersweet moment! Their personalities all shone through and the flow of the story was great, darting from the moon-rabbit to the spirits of the dead and back again. Wonderful look at their friendship!
Peggy B.
New! Entered: 2012-12-29
Ah, I had wondered about the waving in another story; seems I finally found the answer to my wondering. ;)
Such a lovely idea! And it is still so odd to think of those kids as three different generations.
I liked Crackle's reaction at the end, her pouting over something no one wants to experience actually. This was such a typical, child-like reaction.
Heidi Henderson
New! Entered: 2011-07-21
It's so neat to see these characters interacting -- we get to know them a little better by seeing how they spend their free time, so to speak. The touch about Fadestar waving to falling stars was very sweet. It's nice to see her using that to hold on to her past and, I think, to help her adjust to her new future.

(And, I must add, Crackle just made me laugh here.)
Whitney Ware
New! Updated: 2011-01-01
Vickie, the in-joke about owls is a call-out to the wonderful 1990s television series "Twin Peaks." One of the mystic messages delivered to Agent Copper was that "The owls are not what they seem." If anybody in the Holt is likely to start telling stories about dancing dwarves, red curtains and the Black Lodge, it's just gotta be Crackle...
Lyn Cavalier
New! Entered: 2010-02-14
Beautiful! Poor Newt and Fadestar had to grow up a bit faster than Crackle did, methinks. The only one missing here, in my mind, was Otter... lol. But he's getting older faster. I'm glad that Fadestar holds onto her father's story even though she knows it's not real.
Vicki Stephenson
New! Entered: 2010-01-12
Oh, man - how do you do it?! I started crying the moment Fadestar told us her father said a falling star is her mother's spirit. That was so sad and touching, yet cute at the same time. I loved Crackle's story. I want to hear about the owls! What do you mean they're not as they seem? I've missed the joke.
Holly H.
New! Entered: 2010-01-11
Aww! Like others, I really liked that this story so clearly portrayed the different personalities of the three kids, helping to establish them as distinct individuals. And I liked how much like kids they are, too -- especially Crackle's unthinking tactlessness in protesting that it isn't "fair" that she doesn't have anyone who's died! Classic! ;-)

And don't think I didn't notice and get a real chuckle out of "the owls are not what they seem". ;-) Though I blush to admit that it took me to the end of the story to make the connection.
Linda Aarts
New! Entered: 2010-01-06
I was so touched by this story, thanks, Whit! I like fleshing out Fadestar's characters with tidbits like these, and I enjoyed seeing Crackle and Newt responding to it. I think those three will be up for some trouble later on, but for now, let them wave at the stars in peace. Indeed, I hope Stormdancer sees her waving (in fact, it gave me a nice idea for a picture, if I ever have the time to do an extended version ;))
Mareike Heilemann
New! Entered: 2010-01-05
Aww, this is such a sweet story! I love seeing the three cubs together and how they are becoming friends. Great to see them all having their own personalities, and I really liked seeing how Fadestar and Newt appear way more mature than Crackle though she is the oldest.

The end was so sweet! I hope Stormdancer sees Fadestar waving =).
Ellen Million
New! Entered: 2010-01-02
This is wonderfully sweet and very telling about the personalities of each of them.
Melanie D.
New! Entered: 2010-01-01
I love this one. It's such a cute idea and I really like Fadestar's half-child / half-adult thinking here. It's also interesting to see that through they are all about the same age Fadestar and Newt seem so much more mature than Crackle.

I like the characteristic here of each of them. Crackle's storytelling, Fadestar's thoughtfulness and Newt's melancholic optimism.

But what I like the best is to see them growing together and becoming good friends ^^
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