Comments on 'Trying Her Wings'

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Emberra Owen
New! Entered: 2012-03-01
I really enjoyed this, not only seeing a bit of Snowfall when she was young but also seeing what her parents were like and what their opinions were of her and her choices. I must say that these two recognized seem to make a really good pair, they seem to balance each other out rather well. I really enjoyed reading the story. :)
Whitney Ware
New! Entered: 2012-02-21
There's so much written about Snowfall in "our" time, I really wanted to explore a little more of Snowfall's childhood -- and especially her relationship with her parents! Both Bearheart and Dreamberry seem like such vibrant, vivid personalities, I'd love to see more in the future exploring how they helped shape Snowfall and both of her sisters!
Razzle C.
New! Entered: 2011-09-12
I love the detailed description we got with which animal what came from with all of Snowfall's clothes, quiver, etc. *grin* I actually found it pretty funny, as well as adorable of Bearheart to think that an elf over 6 times his elder doesn't know anything he doesn't know himself! LOL. And of course he's not mad at Snowfall, she's his baby girl. :) I found Dreamberry's calm wistfulness went well set against Bearheart's stiff jealousy. Poor them! For elves who live such long lives (unless/until interrupted) their kids sure grow up so darn fast!
Megan McCarthy
New! Entered: 2011-07-24
Awww, Snowdrop was a daddy's girl XD You really captured a father's conflicted emotions well here - he's proud of his daughter and what she's about to do, but at the same time upset that he can't be the one to take her on her important journey. At least Dreamberry found the up-side to the situation! XD
Sofia Lindström
New! Entered: 2011-06-20
Conflicts are always interesting, even when they're not violent or overly dramatic. Bearheart's jealousy of Oakhand was perfectly understandable and made him a more likeable character, not less. And Snowfall's reasoning made perfect sense, when explained by Dreamberry.
Angie Cousins
New! Entered: 2010-08-13
Aww, fathers are so often the same, elf or human. I love the inner fight Bearheart is experiencing. He knows he shouldn't be angry or jealous but he can't help it. Comfort and the status quo are hard to let go when you love your life. Dreamberry's words are wise but not accusing. You can tell she clearly knows her lifemate so well.
Linda Aarts
New! Entered: 2010-02-02
Oh wow, that's awesome. I love getting glimpses of the past, and I felt for Bearheart when he was somewhat jealous that he was not the one Snowdrop had asked to come with her. Snowfall matured very quickly!
Holly H.
New! Entered: 2010-01-11
I really liked getting this look at Bearheart and Dreamberry as parents, but departing from their previous portrayals as sort of all-around, uncomplicatedly "happy". I like that Bearheart is a good guy, but he can still feel jealousy even towards someone he must like and respect, like Oakhand. It's those little dynamics amongst strong personalities that helps give the tribe depth.
Lyn Cavalier
New! Entered: 2009-12-22
Such a true picture of a loving father... not wanting to let his little one grow up, and yet proud of her as well! I especially liked seeing the "human" side, where he was a bit jealous that she chose another over him for taking her on hte walk.
Mareike Heilemann
New! Entered: 2009-12-21
Thank you so much for this again, Whit! I love seeing more of Snowfall's early years and I have come to love her parents as well *hearts them*!

Especially Bearheart is so adorable in this - the big, grumpy bear of a father who still is not willing to let his little girl go XD. But I love Dreamberry's quiet wisdom, too!
Mike H.
New! Entered: 2009-12-20
Hmmmm. I like this look at Snowfall's youth and her father's emotions over seeing his little girl grow up. Imagine though, he had two other daughters to follow her! Thats a lot of angst for one poor elf to bear. ;)
Melanie D.
New! Entered: 2009-12-20
Awww... that was sweet. Poor Bearheart. It's so hard to let the little girl's go ^^ It's almost sweet how he's moping over her decision to ask Oakhand and not him.

Something I really liked her was the preparing talk XD I think everyone knows that "Do you have this and that with you?" It really made me smile ^^
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