Comments on 'Shattered Daydreams'
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New! Entered: 2015-09-29
|I love the illo for this story with the eyes!! Poor little Fadestar! I know what it's like to wake up and be forgetful, and then suddenly remember horrible bad news. You captured that sensation perfectly!!|
New! Entered: 2011-06-29
|The description of wrapstuff-sleep was perfect - still and pleasant, with no sense of time and every hurt blurred. The healing was also interesting, as well as Fadestar's reaction to being aware of her father's death again. Kestrel not pushing her and letting her cry herself to sleep made sense and was very touching.|
New! Entered: 2009-12-20
|Agreeing with the comments that came before but also apologizing for not commenting earlied. *sighs* I've been very bad about posting lately. The story is nicely done and I like it very much. Still though, the part of me that is True Edge is still a bit on uncertain about it. He wants to help and knows that there isnt much he can do. That is hard to accept given his personality. Will have to see how this one plays out going forward so...by all means...write some more...;)|
New! Entered: 2009-12-13
|Aww, this story breaks my heart! Poor little Fadestar ... It was a great idea to describe everything from her point of view, it just feels very close like that. And I liked how Kestrel and the others gave her time and room to come to terms with everything but that Kestrel stayed with her!|
New! Entered: 2009-12-10
|Awww... I love the conversation between Willow and Fadestar in the beginning. That sticks out to me more than anything for some reason. Fadestar trusts the voice without knowing who it is that's sending. |
I agree... it's nice to see different takes on each of the unwrappings. It has to be hard... it may be one reason why, in Canon, the whole tribe slept!
New! Entered: 2009-12-09
|Good job on this one, ladies! Fadestar is really such a different case from Honey -- I think the fact that Honey is a grown-up makes us expect more of her, and her adjustment to her new circumstances; whereas, I have a lot of sympathy for Fadestar. I could also feel, from this, the way her older sister and the others are torn, wanting so badly to make things better with their presence and their love, but knowing (as they must) that it's just not that easy. It has to be terribly hard to WANT to fix things for someone you love, and just not be able to do anything but wait while time helps to make Fadestar more receptive to what they have to offer. I look forward to seeing more about them all!|
New! Entered: 2009-11-30
|Poor little Fadestar. I liked the handling of her grief here. That she's saying she want to be alone but at the same time is glad that Kestrel stays. That's so ... well close to realty. I sometimes felt the same as child when things were rough :) |
I also like how till now each unwarping is described in it's own way and how diffrent it feels for the elves. I can't wait to see more of that :)