Comments on 'Chokecherries'
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New! Entered: 2015-09-07
|I appreciate how Farscout the loner DOES actively care for others in his tribe ~ and how even Chicory was surprised to see that! I loved the little details like him stroking her hair. Farscout reminds me of a guidance councilor who has to legally inform your parents and comforts you as you're waiting!! LOL|
New! Updated: 2012-12-21
|I was wondering what reasons Chicory had for eating stuff the elves all knew were poisonous and the explanation that came to light here was very reasonable and understandable. It also gave an interesting look at the limits of Willow's healing and what role herbalism plays in the tribe when there's magical healing to be had as well.|
New! Entered: 2011-02-18
|Hooray for Farscout giving Chicory a field sobriety test! *wicked grin*|
Seriously, this story is amazing (and having read a couple other things by Molly by now, I can totally see her hand in this here). I agree, it's very descriptive! I also must say I love how Farscout has suddenly drafted Sleuth into his little personal guard to keep Chicory put. :D ...and maybe Chicory just *thinks* she really, really knows her limits... O_O Scary!
New! Updated: 2012-02-21
|Molly performed the major heavy lifting on this story -- I just had the pleasure of coming along for the ride! Molly, you're a joy to collaborate with! And I agree with the comment made by others -- it's fantastic here to see Chicory interacting with a member of the tribe you don't immediately think she would associate with much. If anything, I think that makes it *more* interesting a premise, to bounce characters off of one another whom we've not yet had the opportunity to see interact in any meaninful way Because considering the tiny tiny size of this tribe, no one can really be a stranger to their tribemates...|
New! Entered: 2009-12-09
|I really liked in this how there is a core of purpose and sense to what Chicory is doing... but that doesn't mean she's entirely "right", either. Her seeming lack of self-preservation (is it really? or does she just really, really know her limits?) is an interesting facet of her character that I'd like to see explored more (where does it come from? can anything or anyone really get her to take better care of herself? etc.).|
New! Entered: 2009-11-30
|That was very interesting and nice to read :) I really like to see more action and character of Chicory. About the whole time I pondered if I think of her actions as brave and selfless or foolish .. and decided it seems to be all of it. |
I also like to see her interacting with Farscout. It's always nice to see characters interacting you don't see together that often. It gives the tribe a feeling of being "whole".
And I really like the worry and how it point out Farscout's friendship to blacksnake and Easysinger.
Great job ^^
New! Entered: 2009-11-20
|Hannah said it all!|
I enjoy seeing characters interacting, especially when we don't see them often! :)
New! Entered: 2009-11-18
|Hooray! Bravo! Etc, etc! Lovely ladies, simply lovely! Impeccable work as always, Whitney, and Molly, your first written entry, no? Keep writting, girl, I want more! Those opening lines, so vivid and pastoral, almost Shakespeare-esque in their lushness, and then, [BAM!] dry heaves and vomiting. A perfect transition.|
I love the interaction between these two characters. I'd never thought of them as a pairing, but now I see how their interactions create a perfect ying-yang dialouge: Chicory with her quirks and ambivalent disregard for rules when they get in the way of her learning, and Farscout with his concerns and mile-wide sense for protection. And I must say, Farscouts worry for Chicory was so heart warming and sweet, it really reaffirms what a great guy he is. And I also liked seeing Chicory's "can-do" nature in full stride. She's not willing wait for a magical solution to an immeadiate problem, she's out there trying to solve it, pain and dry heaves be damned.
Again, just beautiful ladies (and sorry if my comments makes little sense, I'm just so excited over this short). Keep it up.