Comments on 'Old Greedygut'
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New! Entered: 2015-09-28
|You would think being The Healer would be a dream come true! But I LOVE the absolute realism with what the gift entails. You can't risk harming yourself, you have to stay close by and you get exhausted after every session! Kind of like having little kids ~ for the rest of your life!! Poor Willow. I can tactically, emotionally and psychically FEEL her discontentment.|
New! Entered: 2012-04-02
|Poor Willow, I really feel for her here - it must smart especially because honey-harvesting is the thing she really excelled at, and now she isn't even allowed to do that on her own any more ... Really liked the honey-harvesting, too, that was great to see! And I absolutely loved the interaction with Beetle at the end - it's lovely to see that she has someone standing steadfast at her side and supporting her, and they are just such an adorable couple.|
New! Updated: 2011-06-29
|Clever bear - of course he'd steal honey from an elf rather than a nest of bees. Elves are smart enough not to go up against a bear on their own and far easier to hit.|
I'm starting to understand Willow's frustration with the tribe and her position as healer much more, for each stories from her POV that I read. Her life has changed a lot and the others don't seem to realize that their arguments are formulated in the worst possible way - it's one thing to call Willow out on her reckless behavior, but another thing entirely to imply she doesn't care about her duties as a healer.
And Honey being there to gloat and mock probably isn't helping things.
New! Updated: 2009-12-11
|The characterization of the bear was great! I could see him lumbering about, then chasing the honeycomb. I can understand how Willow feels. It's painful for her. But I don't imagine it's as painful as Farscout being without his lifemate and unborn child for so long. Maybe things will let up once all the wrapped elves are unwrapped. It just occurred to me that it's very ironic that Willow's new nemesis is named "Honey"!|
New! Entered: 2009-12-09
|I like the way that this becomes a reminder that even the most routine thing in the elves' lives can go wrong in an instant. (I also really liked how, even after everything, with a broken leg and all, Willow seems MOST incensed about losing the honey she harvested! ;-) It's a hard lesson to learn -- and you know, even after this, I'm not entirely convinced that she's learned it.|
New! Entered: 2009-11-30
|Oh I loved this one. I agree I like it that you develop Willow into a healer and show the good and the bad sides of it. I really feel for her. It has to be hard to be burden wit such a strong responsibility and I agree some how . It's not fair but I like how you let shine it through that it's partly because of the tribe's history. |
I hope that Willow will have some more freedom after the last warpstuf elves are healed as well. I really feel for her.
And It was a nice touch to see Willow harvesting honey XD
Oh and of course ... like Lyn said the nice touch of bring Farscout in. Great. SO much story in such little words :)
New! Entered: 2009-11-20
|ohh... poor (sometimes foolish) Willow. You have to feel badly for her... She didn't ask for her world to change but it has, and now she has more responsibility than she ever asked for, and she's doing so well with it, and yet she's also being sheltered more than ever, too. It has to chafe! You're doing such a great job showing us the layers of emotion, thought, action that go with Willow's development as a character! |
Farscout's quiet way of saying without saying, "Please, I need you to be careful--I've waited so long for Brightwood's release--don't go and get killed on me so I have to wait even longer," was a nice touch! A big burden on Willow's shoulders, but one that she will be able to carry!
New! Entered: 2009-11-09
|I really appreciate how you are unfolding Willow's story. She didn't just become a Healer and the world was filled with rainbows and unicorns and everyone lives happily ever after. She has to accept it, figure out how it works, and adjust to her new position in the tribe which doesn't just happen overnight. It should be a hard adjustment for everyone... determining the right mix of risk and responsibility... duty and living life. You are doing a fabulous job showing that process.|